If Mom is silver
and Dad is gold
little brother bronze
or maybe he's old
Your cousin is green
Your twin sister is out
If I could join your fam
I'd scream and shout
Who could I be
I wonder and guess
An uncle or aunt
Loved more or less
because I'm male
can't be the aunts
Maybe the grand-paw
With funny pants
I ponder the question
until there's no end
Maybe I could just be
Your AP friend!
I have a big heart
I'm honest and true
Though I'm always working
I'd make time for you
Offer advice and love
my heart on my sleeve
An honest opinion
that you can believe
My travels are many
my regrets are few
Ask any of my family
If I'd be good to you
I've answered your questions
A glimpse into my design
If I was in your family
Which part would I find?
Author notes
Positions are:
Dad (Gold)
Mom (Silver)
Brother (I'd prefer a big brother, but I can go with a little one, too) (Bronze)
Cousin (Green)
We all can't be the head of the family and I am adoptable!( I like being the baby, but that was a long time ago!
A contest entry
- AP Family by SunDew.
600 points, ended September 25, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A Colorful Family!
Sounds like you have a colorful family going on! Not a bad rating system, makes life far more more interesting than a Family of Beige.
Bless You!
& thanks for the kindly comments on my poem as well.
David
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Sounds like you have quite an extended family Anthony. You may need a bigger table this Thanksgiving. Nice little ditty. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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apparently
you can't give out more applauses...i was trying to give you three this time around. *shrug*
~SunfloweRose -
Eaten Applauses
:'( AP ate my applauses for you...so I'm trying again. -
Much Better!
I like what you added...&, believe it or not, that's the impression I got when you first entered the poem. I think you'd make a fine uncle...but don't quote me until the end of the contest.
Good luck again!
~SunfloweRose -
*smiles*
This is both sweet & funny. It touches me that you'd "scream and shout" just by joining my AP family...it made me laugh, too. I can make more trophies, too...at least, the HM ones. You sound like you nearly always put a smile on someone's face. I get teh feeling that you're also mature (not from you mentioning your age, just something about the poem), & you can handle serious things. Believe you me, that's a great thing when it comes to being my friend/family!
The only thing is...I would have liked to know about you (italicize that for me)...what are your likes or dislikes? what do you believe in? who do you love? what kind of family/friend would you be & why? The stuff that makes you different from every other person out there...that's what I really wanted. Don't be discouraged, though. You did a good job. I like what you wrote.
Good luck in the contest!
~SunfloweRose
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Awww
Sweety I agree with Joyce. Anyone should be honored to have you in their family. I am so happy you are my husband. You will always be my baby. *Hugs and kisses* You did a wonderful job on this poem. Best of luck to you in the contest. Take care.
Much love,
Tali
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I am so glad honored and blessed that you
are already my favorite brother.
This was really cute. How could anyone turn you down,
anyone should jump at the chance to be related to you.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Love Ya,
Joyce
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