Iīm drunk
how to tell this you might ask
easy, iīm talking whats inside,
A kajira far away captivating and beautiful
Lost memories, of broken hearts, and lost loves
burnt and in pain,
holiday abroad,
here i sit typing
my mind open to see
In love with a memory,
fighting for a future through fear,
both failures to be it seems
How can you argue,
against yourself,
the perfect oppenant
knows all seeīs all
how can I win?
lost and alone in thought
nothing new, nothing changes
Sunburns hurting.
Physical pain whatīs new?
Read a dictionary,
and read it plain
Loser
One who has lost or loses continually.
Oh Look
itīs me.
Please tell me what you think
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Mmmm, you've a very good poem here Craig, i actually liked it. Metphor much tho?
Cheer up beb, 
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Really sad and heartbreaking to me. Yet something that so many people feel at some point in their lives. Seeing themselves as nothing really important. Thinking that they fall into the line of losers, but they really don't.
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Wow, so many emotions that so many people feel. My favorite lines were "fighting for a future through fear" We get STUCK don't we. Fear can rule our lives if we let it. And "How can you argue, against yourself, the perfect opponant" We are our own worst enemies. Sometimes no one knows us better than we know ourselves, and this statement is SO true. We are our own worst enemy. We have to rise above and not see ourself as a loser. Once you begin to look at yourself as a winner your entire life changes, even people around you change and treat you differently. But you have to see the light for yourself first. Fight your fear of the future, fight your thoughts of negativity. you ARE a GREAT person!!!!
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I really like this one. The way you wrote it is quite different and made all the difference I think.
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