1.
We coloured badly drawn love hearts on our hands and you told me this was paradise,
Together we lay, on my bed in a haste of delirium and cigarette smoke dancing above our heads, like a floating circus.
All the colours weaved through my fingertips and left tangled ribbons. Glinting like important sun rays.
Radiation, shining through the holes in my eyes, mistaken for precious diamonds by disposable lovers. Believed only by you.
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2.
Strawberry, watermelon, kisses. Placebo's masking the real you, you're the story book ending I am never to read.
You're the misstold story. You're the lie- but neither of us can admit it.
At the moment, I'm holding the teddy you gave me and wearing the shirt you left at my house.
Remember when we used to playfight in the autumn leaves?
It doesn't matter how badly you treated me, I'm still going to love you more everyday, and even though you're with her.
You have to accept that.
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3.
It's my second saturday without you. And I'm thinking of what you're doing.
I feel like calling you, but I know if I do she'll be there. Laughing in the background at your failed attempts to shut her up, pretending that you want to talk to me. But I know you really don't.
I'm just somebody you loved untill you found a much better model in town.
And I'm still waiting for you to come and cuddle me tonight. Because I never needed a teddy bear when I had you.
You'd always be there to awake my nightmares, and you'd always make me forget them.
4.
I've threw out your letters, the promises and the memories you left carelessly in my head.
But I'm keeping the shirt.
Author notes
Flutterby--x
I hope this is okay,
xxxx
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I love section one a ton!
"All the colours weaved through my fingertips and left tangled ribbons. Glinting like important sun rays.
Radiation, shining through the holes in my eyes"
imagery is great.
just a typo in the last part "I've threw out your letters" --> "I've thrown out your letters"
I love how honest this is.. we can let go of some things, or accept them, but we still hold onto one thing or another.
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Beautiful and sad love, terribly so. I'm sorry you have to go through all of this my love.You don't deserve it. I love you sweetie.
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wow
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Wow, princess. You amaze me more everytime (and I didn't think that was possible) This is fucking stunning, like woah. omg I LOVE it. It's so sad and I've definitely been here before. You are brilliant and your descriptions, the way you write, just make everything all too real. I love it precious. AMAZING. I wish I could think of more to say to tell you how perfect this is, just perfect.
♥
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tell me you love me
i love it when you lie.
my god am i there right now.
i.love.you.forever.ever.♥
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Wow. This is stunningly beautiful
When I read the title I thought it would be all [D I R T Y] Pretty]] so this was a welcome change.
The raw emotion expressed is fantastic, something nearly everyone will go through. I love the way that you channeled your emotions so eloquently on paper instead of wallowing in your heartache (if this did happen to you)
Great job
Ellie
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fucking wow babyy
this is amazing.
Can relate a little to well though..
wich makes me sad.
ily yeah?
xx
♥
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wow bby. i think you just explained the situation i am in far more beautifully than i could ever imagine of writing.
every single part of this was beyond amazing.
ily
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