what will become of me now that you have left?
youve taken all your wisdom, and left me so bereft
What will i become? A child of the night
why did you go? Blood is now my only delight.
I loved you with my heart, i loved you with my soul
with you gone my soul isnt here, my heart, just a hole.
Please tell me what you think
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well my dear, if you are talking about the love that has betrayed you talk about that what has brought you to this point. re-read your write, check for puncuation. your so very good at writing down what you feel. ( by the way.... you dont have to rhyme...even though I like it.)
love,
Lestat de lioncourt
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thank you.
i didn't use to rhyme, but ive gotten in... what do you call it? a mood? hmm... i don't know. but thanks for commenting i appriecate your advise.
lenore.
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That is really heartfelt, my friend, you seem very talented! I am glad you can be so honest in your poetry! You don't sugar coat anything, like, sadly, some tend to do, it makes your poetry even more of a delight to read! keep it up! Hasta luego, for now! -
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thank you.
i was thinking about adding to it. but i haven't decided on anything quiet yet. Sugar coatings not a thing i do well
V'''V, Lenore
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Great write.. It flows great and it written from the heart. Wonderful read. Cant wait to read more of your stuff.
-Mrs.Classix
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thank you.
i was thinking about adding to it. but i haven't decided on anything quiet yet.
V'''V, Lenore
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