Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Seasonal Concerto

 

 

Naked gallows
erect and tall,
crimson and maize
surround beneath.

 

Twitters and chirps
from sturdy twigs
redbreasted, resplendent
songs raised gloriously
holding on
til last moments
of Autumn.

 

Soon downy blankets
of purity
shield frozen sod
from daytime sun
and inevitable sear.

 

Days turn to nights,
nights to day
throughout Winter
surpassing Father Time
welcoming New Year.

 

Neo verident pluckings,
lonely, but sassy daffodils
peer forth
as beckoned by the sun.

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 13 of 13

  • Sweet Jane
    February 9, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Great remarklble poem grandma.
    you are the great person and good grandma to me.


  • leo2
    September 21, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    I'm drawing a blank..... What is POD? I see for some reason or other this was disqualified. In my book it is worthy of my admiration and applause.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • trista gold member
    September 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    A truly lovely read, and had this been in a POD with this theme I think it would have done well. Thank you for taking the time to enter. I'm sure we'll see you again in future contests.

    Best wishes,
    ~J.


  • guttermouth
    September 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    As Bear mentioned, this did not stick to the rules or the theme of the POD for the contest. As such, I am unable to provide a detailed rating. As a poem, this is wonderfully written with beautiful imagery. I regret we're unable to consider it as it is a lovely piece. ~Eric


    • pattyann4500
      September 20, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      Thank you. I must have gotten sidetracked on the theme. I appreciate your comment. Patricia


  • Arkbear gold member
    September 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    Oh my ~

    An incredible way to start the POD ~

     

    Everything from the Title to the background....

     

    LOVED IT!!!

     

    Well.....almost everything ~

     

    :)

     

    I am not fond of *run-on* lines ~

    I felt as if I had to grab another breath

    just to get through your stanzas ~

     

    ....and in doing so....the Flow was distorted big time ~

     

    This does not take away from your entry....yet it does

    make for a stumbling first read ~

     

    Very impressed.....but sad to see it was not

    penned toward the Theme given ~

     

    I can not score this piece ~

     

    I am sooooo sorry ~

     

    Bear ~

    • pattyann4500
      September 20, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      Thank you, Bear. Not to be sorry. I read it wrong, so once again, it is my mistake. I'll not give up. I will certainly be around again. If my muse doesn't fail me again, I'll try the next one. Hugs, Patricia


  • XxKillerxXLettexX
    September 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    I really like the background Pattyann. This is sooo beautiful and makes me wish for a good Iowa snowstorm.
    Great poem too. Keep up the great work! s


  • Beverlynohime
    September 19, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    This is beautiful. I'm very impressed.

1 - 13 of 13