Golden apple hangs
on seductive branch,
deception's decoy
of raging temptation;
Peeled skin of moist
intentions bury seed
in manifested gardens,
as allure is licked
from desirous lips,
that taunt ravished appetite-
Designated fingers tap
on hormonal shoulders
that directs attention
to transgression's stage,
while performing dramatized skits
for confused heart-
Where stage is transformed
into flaming libido,
reenacting love scenes
from Hollywood plagiarism
and melting into puddles
of whimpered groans;
Leading man waits for
next co-star to pass by
in slow motion
Author notes
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A contest entry
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300 points, ended September 20, 2007, 8 entries
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Comments
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I wil try...I havent written very many in the past year due to my pregnancy and birth of my twins. How old can the poem be??
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I thought this write had heartpounding imagery and emotion, but sadly it is older then three months old and therefore we can't accept it.
Do you think you that you could please enter another one? -
Stellar.
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Amy,
You always have a way of leaving the reader with spine-tingling sensations that are damn near unforgetable. Your imagery is up there with the best of the best and really bring the mind on a euphoric journey that leaves you longing for more. Thank you for entering and good luck!
Blessings
Bel
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OH, WAIT! I READ THIS ALREADY! DUH!
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Okay, the applauds won't show up for some reason. I was trying to give you three.
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Sorry, forgot these.
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Don't start disappearing on me just yet. Your poem is lovely.
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I'm a little unsure if this passes beyond lust or not. I feels like it might - but then the ending brings me back and makes me think - maybe not...maybe it's more of a fantasy? I loved your title. It was very intriguing and made me want to see what the poem would be about. The poem left tingles up and down my spine, which I consider a verrrrrry good thing.
Rhythm and flow are both good, and then the imagery - just outstanding. A very solid write, and most enjoyable to read. TY for your entry and good luck in the judging.
Best wishes,
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Title - I really enjoyed the title. The use of "Tasting Drama..." really made me intrigued as to just what I would find inside. 10/10
Appearance - Appearance was nice scan wise. Color scheme was pretty generic... Middle of the road here but I liked the text/color contrast which helps the score a bit in this area. 8/10
First Impression - I really enjoyed the write. I disagree with Bear that it went too far, and felt it was a nice description of the topic. I thought you did a great job of capturing it and did so in a wonderfully written way. 9/10
Rule Adherence - I found no violation of the rules. 10/10
Rhythm - Very nice rhythm for the most part. Broke up a couple of times with longer lines, particularly the "dramatized skits" line. 9/10
Imagery - Great imagery. This was a descriptive masterpiece. It was just enough to be great without going over the line. 10/10
Originality - Very original, and unique perspective and way of brining the "lust" message across. Nicely done! 10/10
Spelling/Word Usage - I found no spelling errors or incorrect word usage. 10/10
Grammar - I found no grammatical errors. 10/10
Ease of Understanding - Great metaphor and description, did have to read through a couple of more times to truly capture everythying, but overall very good. 9/10
Total Score - 95/100 -
OMG ~
Oh my....I had to put the parking breaks on for this write!
WOWZER!
I do, however, feel as though you went over to the Erotica side just a weeeeeee bit ~
Lust is a powerful emotion, which requires personification....and must be kept inside ones self to enjoy, without the splendor of another ~
Watch out for your focus on this emotion ~
You Flow kept me on my toes....perfect punctuation usage ~
Your presentation is very generic.......Title is very clever ~
*Leading Man....Adam......can you imagine if there was more than one Eve??*
Hmmm...maybe it was...STEVE! ....j/k ~
Here are the other areas I looked at ~
Good luck Poet....this rocks....but your ability to keep it on the right side of the fence will hurt you in the scores ~
Bear ~
Title 10
Flow 10
Depth 9.9
Theme 8.2
Feelings 10
Grammar 9.7
Presentation 9.1
Uncommonness 9.8
Sit & Ponder Affect 9.6
Ability to follow Rules 10
Bears Score: 96.3
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oh my...lustful in such a classy act!!! words are carefully chosen and yet the images are well-formed...truly providing the seductive stage of lasciviousness...
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Uh-huh; that's what I'm talkin' bout. Superb.
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