I'm fairy nature,
Come to collect fall's leaf wares
to help make a coat.
A coat of sunsets,
A last breath of summer's glow
To wrap up autumn.
I disguise myself
Living amongst the woodlands,
squirrels, bugs, birds, bees.
Slowly with magic
I single handedly turn
The season's over;
Sweeping winds and driving rains,
Giving nature rest till spring.
I nourish the land.
Autumn's blanket becomes crisp,
Stark, white, purity,
I contrast, redecorate
New, sleek, sexy, wavy tones.
Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry that flows from my thoughts, though the picture I see is greater, I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
A contest entry
- Chain Haiku's of Nature IX with added twist of a Double tanka or Free Verse; Soothe my heart and win 3 month Gold Membership (Must be a member of Visions though Haiku) by InBetweenThoughts.
1450 points, ended October 8, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fire,Water,Earth,Air by Flight of Dragons.
550 points, ended February 7, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is wonderfully written and it is awsome that you won a bronze trophy, wonderful flow of words and awsome detail work.
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Beautifully penned useing awesome imagery. I enjoyed your poem very much
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this poem is very well done
it has personification of the things you decribe
leaves and wind are doing human actions
it does flow very well. just so beautiful full of action and emotion
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Beautiful and Peaceful
Niaish for sharing my friend. I love nature and the image of a fairy making all the changes.
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Anything written in the beauty of nature I could never find fault with. Very nicely written.
Sheila
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BEAUTIFUL
My dear sweet sister your words are so soft and beautiful...they paint a most awesome picture of Mother Nature...Please know you are loved and missed...your beautiful words have been chosen to share with your family, enjoy all the love and keep smiling
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I LOVE THIS!... don't really have anything else to say...
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An enjoyable piece of poetry, Spring is nearly here, it is already peeking at us from the shades, time to put the coat on the hanger and feel the new warmth, a good poem.
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cool poem and defiantly unique I enjoyed reading it
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Nice, I like the concrete nature of your details and imagery. It really brings to life your poem.
Though perhaps you might enjoy writing another poem inspired by this one. I would be interested in seeing your talents aimed at describing a fairy and the setting in which the fairy is in.
I like this poem you've created. Not a fan of punctuation, so I can't comment on whether or not it is correct. Just be careful that the punctuation does not distract...
And try to be sparse with your adverbs. It's not a problem in this poem at all. Just a friendly reminder. -
An amazing write I just loved the entire piece.
You have captured the beauty of nature in all of it's splendor and it's purpose in every season.
Congrats. on winning the Bronze Trophy and well deserved.
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Brilliant
The imagery in this is brilliant. The flow of the words really bring this piece to life. Wonderful descriptions here. I can feel Nature within this piece. Well done Anna.
All the best
Wayne
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Beautiful natural description here Congrats on the bronze.
Thanks for your comment
All the best
Pozo
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I LOVE THIS!
Written with precision with a fresh look!
I'm very picky with form poetry...
But this
is stellar! Thank you and congrats on the cup.
Well deserved!
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This is a pretty cool nature poem that you've wrote here. I liked all the color and the way you were kind of personifying mother nature. It made me think of a happy well adjusted older woman that is getting herself ready for a holiday party. You can see all the shiny sequins and silk fabrics she drapes over herself. It's great!
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awesome write my friend you really do paint a picture with your words for the reader
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A charming mixture of form! Imagery is vivid and compells the reader to visualize with detail. Awesome poem. Congratulations on your bronze trophy
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your images and observations and are superb an enchanting , love this xxpp thank you dear A
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ooh nice imagery give me a new idea ummmmm
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I love the way you've taken this one ...
splendid ideas throughout ...
congrats on the bronze trophy!
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Congratulations on your lovely Bronze award. It was well deserved. Your poem was picked after great thought and debate for its creativity, unique wording throughout, wonderful storyline and no flaws found within. Syllable counts and spelling were on cue.
Again thank you for your lovely entry, have a beautiful day, Ken IBT
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pretty and so serene, nice foundation to a poetic poem that is indeed formed here,good job,...mm
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Very lovely. I like this one for its simple beauty and ease of imagery. There is a playfulness expressed here and a child-like wonder. This is a good example of personification poetry as you personify "fairy nature". Line 2 should be written "Come to collect fall's leaf wares" or perhaps "...fall's leaf's wares" Very enjoyable read.
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Yes it is!
"picture text" "rainbow lines" "glowing thoughts" Loverly...ian.
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this is very beautiful, the imagery ...excellent job, loved it completely!
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breathtaking
Thank you for sharing such lovely poem and good luck in contest.
Smile,
Judy
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