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The Special Book

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The course he sought and then he took

Had no professor, just a book.

The book was new, with print quite large,

The price was right, there was no charge.

But often things that easy come

Turn out to be quite troublesome.

The bookcase shelf a mite too small,

It’s stashed somewhere he can’t recall.

But now and then it’s noticed there,

That book, when new, that seemed so fair.

A smile, a pat, a furtive look,

He’s off to read a diff’rent book.

But oh so quick the time flies by,

And now he needs an alibi.

The daily quizzes, failed them all,

His back is now against the wall.

Today the final’s here at last,

Our lad is reading, double fast.

He crams to make up for lost time

And doesn’t hear the class bell chime.

Perhaps his cramming’s all for naught,

And he has lost the grade he sought.

Imprudence forced this quick review

And now the book is overdue.

A cocky smile, he’s at the door,

Expecting an outstanding score.

It’s locked and light begins to dawn,

He checks and lo, the book is gone.

Author notes

Came about during a conversation with a friend and a little metaphorical talking. A mite unusual for me but fun to do.

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  • Ellis gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    Anyone who has stayed in school
    Has in this way played the fool
    I always brought all my books home
    But study them -- rarely -- moan
    ------


  • Darianna
    October 18, 2007

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    Creatively Crafted

    Yep, been there done that in various sorts of ways. Best is to always look to the future and be prepared always!

    HUGS, Dari xxx

  • Judith Chandler
    October 3, 2007

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    a sense of wasted time

    that's how I interpret it. It's too late and his cramming is in vain. Nice structure, well thoughtout.


  • Dienush
    September 30, 2007

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    I really like this. I'm usually a bit inclined to prefer free verse but the metaphor here is strong. To me it sounds as if you're talking about the lessons of life rather than an actual school course, and you've kept up that metaphor nicely throughout the poem. I especially liked the second half, particularly the fourth and fifth stanzas. And, though as I said I think some messages are more powerful without rhyming, you've kept the rhyme scheme and meter very well here.


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    September 20, 2007
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    I feel bad, I only realized I had commented on this before after I had clicked. and since it is featured I wish not to take your points and not leave a footprint. But since Arrianna has already commented, perhaps that other girl we were talking about can comment too

    lovely poem. Reminds me of when my western Civ final came around and I was studying even at work in the dishroom. and somehow, i read 300 pages and made a low B. Ah I miss the good old days.

    very wonderfull poem Grampa


  • Amanda the Panda
    September 20, 2007

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    Nicely rhymed

    While reading this, the voice I imagined reciting this was that of Gollum..from lotr, I'm sure you know. Ha ha haha. Because he rhymes aloud to Frodo while Frodo is struggling to avoid over-possessiveness to the ring in the dark of the night just before dawn. Anyways, I loved it, especially because it reminds me of the appreciationg of books in general. I'm attempting to become a bibliophile, in attempts to communicate better, motivation to write and do it better, learn words! But yeah. I love this. good job,.


  • tanzanite
    September 20, 2007
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    Well done on this piece. It is a familiar tale and I glad that you reminded me once more today. This book is sometimes so precious and other times we callously hide it underneath other things that seem more important at the time. It always seems to assume its rightful place though, doesn't it. Well done.

  • Acidanthra
    September 20, 2007

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    I liked this. Good use of words and flow. Interesting plot indeed... Thank god i have no school! LOL


  • Denierim
    September 20, 2007

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    A lot of people can relate to this, I believe. For me, there were actually a few thoughts and meanings that came to my mind while reading this and that's one of the best thing I know about poetry. How they can be read in so many ways. The story itself might be clear, but something in it twists it all up to be something else. In this poem, aside from the obvious, I saw life. A life written in a book that's only read when the final dawn is coming forth. It might be just me, but that's what this made me think about. I have to say, there are only a few poems that make me think this much and that is a bit sign of the fact I love this poem.

    Wonderful write with this one! I can only agree to everything said this far. Definately one of my favorites out there!


  • The Imperfection
    September 20, 2007

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    wow...(funny how i'm reading this as i ditch school)...it really shows how wonderful things are right in front of people and they never notice! a beautiful message is within this creative poem. great job!


  • daviscth
    September 20, 2007

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    I enjoyed this very much. The last stanza summed it up quite nicely!

    Congrats on having your first book published!!


  • Legend silver member
    September 20, 2007
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    All the other comments seem to have said it all so may i just add Excellent

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    September 20, 2007
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  • quantumsurveyor
    September 20, 2007

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    Yes, a smiling reward for the reader. Nicely balanced and good rhyme scheme. What else to say except - thanks so much for the read.

  • Climbing2nothing
    September 20, 2007

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    Today the final’s here at last,
    Our lad is reading, double fast.

    yeah nice write, its funny how you find the right book at the right time (and thats not always in sync with the school)and so for knowledge well prescribed and a some nicely tuned rhyme a bid you cheers w beers
    -JAS


  • darkmermaid
    September 20, 2007
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    Great one! I love the rhyme scheme. Keep it up!


  • maa gold member
    September 20, 2007

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    what a joy to read one of your poems after such a long time, my friend ... as usual, your poetic talent radiates from every letter in this delightful poem ... thank you for sharing your wisdom in such a playful and lighthearted manner ...


    maa


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    September 19, 2007
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    oops! i reread this and realized it was not in a contest as i first thought. i loved the metaphors and the imagery you created iwth this write. viyanna rosemarie


  • Ishtar
    September 19, 2007

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    Hey!
    You still have form going, which kept you in the medium of familiarity, though the metaphorical aspect is wonderfully crafted.
    Am I surprised? Of course not. I always expect wonderful things from you and I'm never disappointed.


    Nicely done, baldy. Teehee.

    -Reni, the granddaughterish.


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    September 19, 2007

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    this is so adorable. reminds me of my college days. That Western Civ book was so huge


  • Lysithea
    September 19, 2007

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    haha how cute. Your rhyming and such always makes me wanna get up and do a little dance while I read.

    Lovely, as usual. I'm gonna have to read it again and add a tune to it. haha.

    Love you, Sir and nice job!


  • AshleySmashley
    September 19, 2007
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    Reminds me of every time i need to take a test..
    Good job. !!


  • Gatlianne
    September 19, 2007
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    eeeeeeee

    Yerp

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