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- Underground Sonata -

 

 

 

Faces disappeared from thought through ebony screens
beyond sharpened bellows
of an underground sonata at sunrise
where shards of light inflicted lessons
on conscious cadavers in wake.

The undead walked into walls of painted rainbows,
only to discover their dreams had dissipated
within words spoken also written
as eulogy on stones of granite above ground;

man-made markers erected to emphasize
life and death with dignity,
even if their breath before burial
was putrid in smell.

Feet dragged deep into fresh cement
to leave legacy (chicken scratches)
after sun siphoned moisture from slab.

Only to find time stopped ticking
when hands grabbed, groped ankles
and pulled all memory of existence
underneath sidewalk near street
with witnesses oblivious,
still walking over screams in requiem.



Author notes

Username: Desire
(Read these offline...
but will comment on these pieces tonight)

Asfand
Promise
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3436640

DancingRed
black tea at 8pm
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3432164

Neon Twilight
September shadows
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3429550

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  • ocmack
    October 5, 2007

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    I especially like the language. Elevated perhaps - but that's what sets it apart from the norm, making this piece unique.


  • Ethereal One gold member
    October 2, 2007

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    Outstanding

    The words fall out of your pen so fluently. I can visualize each stanza very clearly in my mind. The last stanza is very powerful.

    Good luck in the contest!

    Ethereal One


  • thepoetssoul
    September 28, 2007

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    I found this poem to be absolutely astonishing.
    The imagery is breathtaking and rhythm splendid
    This is ver well written with beautiful wording.
    I really enjoyed reading this piece.
    Best of wishes to you

    Tony


  • Lady Eventide
    September 28, 2007

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    I loved several phrases in this piece, but the one that I found the most startling was: "The undead walked into walls of painted rainbows." I believe you did an extravagant job.


  • Tangled Angle
    September 19, 2007
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    Your poets are:
    Asfand
    DancingRed
    & Neon Twilight

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