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lebka duha.

 

it was dusk when you slalomed
through what would be the last snowfall.
heavily ladened,
your feet were on fire; your mouth
was a tavern of secrets.
as you walked, i saw nothing but the snow melting
beneath your feet
like a river.
it was heavenly. i tasted the water in my mouth;
tasting you like tea, suspended.
unendingly beautiful.

three days before pentecost
was when you died.
no matter how many nights i spent rolling stones away,
your memories-- like bones-- were always left in place,
in peace.

i tried recreating dreams, painting on canvas
and expressing what i was feeling; as if even i

could understand.


my breath was a prism in those days,
a myriad of colour.

i lost interest in the spirit, then.
my body was hijacked.


my years were regrettably alone.
i'm waiting, still, for your
return, you know.

 

i'm waiting for this fog to leave

a stain of promise

on my heart.


one

 

etched with your

soul. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • DrunktankLullaby
    September 30, 2007

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    this is INCREDIBLE.
    & it is compltely impossible for me to pick a favorite part. I loved every word and line of it.


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    September 25, 2007

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    Awesome! Very touching poem. You are a gifted writer. I really liked the first ever poem I read from you. Wonderful work. I'm curious to know what does the title of this poem mean. The imagery of your poem is very powerful, your sentiments are well expressed. This poem reminded me of someone...

    All the best,
    Charishma


  • Macey Muse
    September 23, 2007
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    .


  • RachelSchuyler
    September 22, 2007
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    talent*

  • RachelSchuyler
    September 22, 2007

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    this really hit me hard. i am blown away. the way you describe things, its unreal.

    you have a wonderful talen :]

    God Bless


  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    September 21, 2007
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    Unique....

    Simply outstanding...

  • vertigo beat
    September 20, 2007
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    Lovely. I think I envy you.


  • thelovesongwriter
    September 20, 2007

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    i tried recreating dreams, painting on canvas
    and expressing what i was feeling; as if even i

    could understand.

    ""
    beautiful job.


  • spine
    September 20, 2007

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    "your feet were on fire; your mouth
    was a tavern of secrets."

    "i'm waiting for this fog to leave
    a stain of promise
    on my heart."

    Great lines.
    Your poems always have so many different ways to interpret them, it's never boring.

    Lovely write.


  • BlueNote27
    September 19, 2007

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    Great stuff, I'm definitely liking your new format. In particular, I love the layers of everyday mixed with the religious references and overtones.

    On a side note, your jew-ness put me in a different frame of mind... I read the first line as
    "it was dusk when you shalom-ed..."

    • marrow
      September 19, 2007
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      I really appreciate that comment, and ROFL at the "shalom- ed."


  • Phineas Red
    September 19, 2007

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    Excellent work. You seem to be on a streak about rolling away the stone, (just an observation.) That first stanza's gotta be my favorite.


  • Febs
    September 19, 2007
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    excellent work

    i like the stanza about "recreating dreams" it's well done. well done on all of it actually.

    • marrow
      September 19, 2007
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      Thank you very much for returning the comment, and the compliment.

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