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Invisible Chains

Simply put another insignificant rambling of written word.

Lost and stricken within the depths,

a long forgotten heart beat.

Thoughts enter the lingering mind, yet none matter,

far too much time has witherd away.

A mirage decieves me as it usually does,

a false image projected on an even more false reality.

I stand upon shattered glass,

with every step part of my flesh ripped away,

so I shall stand frozen, never wavering,

for if I cannot be whole I will not rip myself further apart.

I have not become numb, nor can I feel sensation,

this ordinary human sense faltered and left me so long ago.

It is as if floating in the ever moving atmosphere,

looking down in longing yet suspended.

Suspended here by invisible chains,

my pupils dilated, the mirage sustained by it's own luster,

how else could I expect it to be,

for I feel yet I do not.

Comprehension shall find no mind,

for how can understanding be reached or glimpsed,

when the mind that created the thought can not find comprehension?

That is the thing.

The world in disaray due to a lack of understanding.

So here I hang in my weary orbit, two fronts divided,

an unfinished piece of pointilism attempting to form a picture.

This place I left so long ago seems swept up.

Broken memories scattered about the plains,

never to be explained to their full extent,

for this is what it has all come down to,

simply put another insignificant rambling of written word.

 

 

 

 

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  • moonburndcheese
    January 24, 2008

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    wow this is very well written and i really like it... idk what else to say i just have to read it again lol...


  • takemypainaway
    January 23, 2008

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    this is really good the peice just has such good imagry
    "I stand upon shattered glass,
    with every step part of my flesh ripped away,
    so I shall stand frozen, never wavering,
    for if I cannot be whole I will not rip myself further apart.
    I have not become numb, nor can I feel sensation,
    this ordinary human sense faltered and left me so long ago"
    Very amazing lones these are.... keep up the good work...
    --kat


  • daniyalbutt
    January 18, 2008
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    really great work!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • daniyalbutt
    January 18, 2008

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    amazing

    really amazing and brillant. and I really loved your background theme.I really liked your interpretation.
    Ithink you had a way with words. you are a true poet because i could see the reflection in your poetry. I is really ver whimsical and innovative.I really liked your ending about the 'broken memories'. The memories which were scattered.
    these ending lines were simply the great.
    but overall a very good write. keep it up!!!!!!!!


  • PerfectTonight
    November 17, 2007

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    Great piece. I love the imagery, and it seems very icely conceptualized though you claim it be just "another insignificant rambling of written word".

    Thanks for entering my contest!


  • Keyser Soze
    October 26, 2007

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    Wow... you penned a powerful piece here my dear. There are a few things that I would change myself... but that would make it mine and not yours - but I too like your interpretation.
    I won't repeat the good things said below, as I loved them too...
    Perhaps I'll say, as a very good poet once did - poems need not look like poems; poems should look like poems sound. I think it would do justice to your poem to mess things up a bit... play with spacing and lines and overall structure. you can make a reader feel different feelings, or more specifically the feelings that you most wanted to convey by the simple use of structure...
    Just an idea.

    Thanks for the wonderful moment


  • Cinder
    October 23, 2007

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    I fear I don't have enough words to tell you how amazing this poem was. I will say I loved the ending, though I did as a whole, the ending just made all the words collide beautifully. I'm honored to have you in my contest. Thank you for entering and Good Luck!


  • Repetitious Chaos
    September 26, 2007

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    You know, Dear Poet..I'm having difficulty to
    comment in a way that would give your art justice..
    Thoughts enter -my- lingering mind, yet none matter,
    for you have said it all.
    Well written!
    ~May the ink in your pen flow freely~

    Chaos


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    September 22, 2007

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    I love the concept here. I can see why its on your favorite list. This poem read so well. Sometimes ramblings speak more truths then pre meditated thought.
    Very well done.
    I loved the lines "I stand upon shattered glass,
    with every step part of my flesh ripped away,
    so I shall stand frozen, never wavering,"
    Again, great writing and I hope you do well in your contest.


  • Nephalaneous lover
    September 21, 2007

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    very kool...theres some mixed emotions in this piece, and interesting how you delivered thisgreat write
    amazing background

  • californiagirl
    September 19, 2007
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    This was an interesting piece. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for your entry!


  • PerfectImperfection
    September 19, 2007

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    Very thought provoking I must say. The abstract quality of it all... It reminds me much of life's lessons, and the questions never to be addressed. Great depth, very intriguing really. Something to absorb and appreciate! Well done dear!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    Thank for sharing this with me.
    This was brilliant like 10,000 splashes of ink coming together to form art.
    You are talented.
    Keep writing!

    P.S
    Cool background

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