Invisible, a super power, a gift....
both are wrong, its a curse
that can't be turned off
or one that will always haunt us
Invisibility, no need for hiding
no one sees you as it is, next to them, or in front of them
you're not even on their radar
can't do anything about it, this curse is yours to bare
Invisibility, no need to fight it
cause there's no way to fight it
the one you admire, love, or respect doesn't know you
doesn't see you, hear you, or smell you
it is always haunt you
Being invisible is a curse Intel
you embrace it, knowing that you are not seen by your peers
you wouldn't be afraid to be yourself
your self will never hide from people that can't see you
And only then... you will be seen
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Interesting take on this, and I think we could all identify with it in some way or another -
thanks for entering
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Wow
Very true, i've felt this personally. Nice job!
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Plz Answer me
I can't see any notes here & I asked u before which song you chose, yet I got no replies
Plz tell me which song you're inspired by coz I'm trying to end this contest, otherwise I'm so sorry to say that you'll be DQed...
Thnx & good luck -
Your last few words were powerful, thirsting for recognition gives others power over you...the best thing one can do is be themselves and thats when you shine.
loving ur poem. -
Left-align was in the rules. But seeing as how I'm on a commenting streak, I see no reason not to leave a note here on the poem itself. I found this rather vague, emotionally. Perhaps you intended that so the reader might take from it many different things, but in the end, I felt really apart from this piece because of the vague choice of phrasing. A lot of telling, and not a lot of showing going on here. Still, I think it can go places very powerful with more attention to detail. Thanks for entering.
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Lovely
Excellent but which song inspired you??
You read my rules? -
yeah... spelling mistakes were very annoying... but great peice, really enjoyed it... oh, and aside from spelling errors there were some gramatical mistakes, but those might have been on purpose i guess... very powerful words, well expressed opinions and a strong sense of self shining through, i enjoyed it, well done, keep writing!!!
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both are wrong, it's a curse
that can't be turned off
or one that will always haunt us
there you go...correction made -
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THANKS.....
other than a few mistakes that a 16 year old made, did ya like it???
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excellent
One thing though, please do a spell check, theres nothing more annoying than reading a potentially powerful piece and seeing it full of spelling errors.
Other than that, a wonderful piece of poetry.
Good luck in my contest.
Zoe xxx -
wow....i always wanted 2 b invisible...not anymore! i love how u make an average want seem like a curse. i love it! great job!
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Welcome to All Poetry !
A very true write penned here. I thought this was a bit depressing until I read your last few lines and then your wisdom shined through. Well done!
Keep writing, reading and commenting.
If you need any help here at AP please don't hesitate to contact myself or any other online Greeter. We are always willing to help
Gaylene
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