Hush, hush my darling why do you cry?
You can’t help the way you feel so block the pain between your thighs
To make this experience more real
The flirting and seduction are only half the story
So now its time to be fulfilled
Just the once babe its compulsory
The suicidal lullabies
They’re pounding in my head
I want them gone
Replaced with thoughts of you instead
Tonight’s the night
Tomorrow will never come
The lights arrive
And everything goes numb
Mary, Mary quite contrary how does your garden grow?
With funeral depression or maybe a dash of sorrow
Listen to what I’m saying I can’t stand to see you this way
Let me coerce your heart and mind to today’s reason for self-annihilation
The suicidal lullabies
They’re pounding in my head
I want them gone
Replaced with thoughts of you instead
Tonight’s the night
Tomorrow will never come
The lights arrive
And everything goes numb
Darling can’t you see that what you want is just not real
Don’t fight it just agree because I don’t want to hear you squeal
Fleeing from the scene stumbling on jagged stones
Heading for the noose precariously hung
Inside your house you unknowingly set my plans
The suicidal lullabies
They’re pounding in my head
I want them gone
Replaced with thoughts of you instead
Tonight’s the night
Tomorrow will never come
The lights arrive
And everything goes numb
Beautiful and porcelain you lay in your open coffin
A classic suicidal case and I wept at all the right moments
Never suspecting that it was me that led you to this
Always thinking it was you who felt insecure and scared
The suicidal lullabies
They’re pounding in my head
I want them gone
Replaced with thoughts of you instead
Tonight’s the night
Tomorrow will never come
The lights arrive
And everything goes numb
I found out that I loved you much too late… (The suicidal lullabies)
A memory…surrounding your last resting place…(Everything goes numb )
Please tell me what you think
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amazing
so well done. such great descriptions. so well put together. loved the "everything going numb" and the beautiful porcelain face in the coffin" and the pounding lullabies". however, did not like "tomorrow will never come" too obvious. you should take some credit/responsibility. you are setting him free sort of. make it sound like you are sending him to a hopefully better place
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I usually dont do critical opinions so ...ha. this is a very well written piece. I like it as a heavy rock song. bit of a downer, but that is where we wanted it to go. I think it is strong and intense. bravo. a job well done.
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Wow!
I liked the refrain the best.
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Wow! I like this a lot!
This is way good! I love the wording! And the way it flows.
The suicidal lullabies
They’re pounding in my head
I want them gone
Replaced with thoughts of you instead
Tonight’s the night
Tomorrow will never come
The lights arrive
And everything goes numb
Beautiful and porcelain you lay in your open coffin
A classic suicidal case and I wept at all the right moments
Never suspecting that it was me that led you to this
Always thinking it was you who felt insecure and scared
This was my favorite part. I don't know why it just sorta smacked me in the face I guess!
Well anyways this is a way good poem and I really enjoyed reading it!
Natalie
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yet another good poem/song from hannah
very jealous
i do like this muchly
good job
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wow very sad but good
i like it a lot
its very deep
keep going with it
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Thats freaking amazing writing...depressing but good!
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