tears fall onto the floor
from a frozen face
calling out his name,
you enter your disgrace
could he cure your tragedy?
the wounds across your wrists
begin to bleed once more
these hidden tears
unanswered prayers
and harmful pleasures
equal more torment than the
human mind dares to remember
but what they call a "sin"
this love of eternity
was meant for us,
only to be relinquished in misery.
so here they are
laid about and displayed,
the tears of a fallen angel.
A contest entry
- INSPIRE ME TO WRITE AGAIN by forever dreaming.
1500 points, ended October 4, 2007, 52 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I think it has a nice, flow, I like the content very nice, and the meaning makes it even better
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Wow! I love the last line! I can relate too well to this Beautiful write! Wow
Leslie
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commiserate
as i read i felt like you were writing about me - i saw my own life - your words describing me - tears falling once again -
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Inspiring in all good ways
i understand... it isn't great to be pushed away in a relationship.. i still feel the loss for what i truly want. if you haven't read the book series Twilight by Stephenie Meyer, i ask you to read it and put everything to thought too. i understand alot of things and my heart is the biggest thing i can understand... falling in love then having it break apart.. not fun.. love the poem
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I am surprised I enjoyed this !!
Although this would not normally be something that I enjoy reading I have added it to my finalists list as I feel that you have created a very strong poem without slapping me in the face with details to gruesome for me to read. I enjoyed the style of layout you have used with the run-on lines which I feel really adds to the depth of this piece. Really well thought out piece of poetry. Good luck and many thanks for entering my contest. -
I enjoy reading this....great write
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very sad and dark...but overall I love it...keep up the good work.
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I love this poem, it is beatiful, keep up the outstanding work. And thank you for all the comments on my poems!
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**applause** anotehr masterpiece.
so sweetly dark.
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