Surrender to shadow’s slip;
palm to breast,
slippery brush sigh,
birchy arm reach
for more dry autumn skin
slipping on bits of tattered trust,
downed by indecision
she sees darkness
fold his lack of faith
in them
morning etches evidence
of barked shins
having crawled to own
her midnight dreams
Author notes
prompt: "A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world. "
Oscar Wilde
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A contest entry
- PIF Early Bird Quickie...10/50/30 by poet2angels.
575 points, ended September 19, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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congrats on bronze you earned it ...every time I read it it paints a new pic in my head ...I like the last stanza the best....
morning etches evidence
of barked shins
having crawled to own
her midnight dreams
katie
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you make it too easy Carol
You need a contest to create the heart
all over again for evolution's sake.
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it is not easy, but it seems to be a lady in waiting that scrolls out once it is triggered. That's all I can say to explain.
ty Michael thomas.
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This is beautifully done!
Such a powerful and vivid take on the prompt!
Amazing as always...
Lynda
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ty, pen friend. You are so missed when I do not catch you first thing int he morning.
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Well thatch is scratch of roof to hatch
such a house of understanding
and these words rock in head to roll
New England's Wednesday sun to quiver...
wonderful pen friend -
Well thatch is scratch of roof to hatch
such a house of understanding
and these words rock in head to roll
New England's Wednesday sun to quiver...
wonderful pen friend
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ty, Kaibab, we seem to ahve the same waking hours but yours is much earlier than mine..I believe one or two hours difference...
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Wow grand imagery love the flow and tones as I read making this most enjoyable best of luck to you
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ty. I have been draming a great deal lately.... I appreciate yoru stopping by to comment.
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That last stanza is so true and very powerfully written.
Wonderful take on the prompt.
All the best to you.
Gaylene
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ty, Gaylene. I tried scripting my dreams for a logn time, so I woudl only ahve ones that were sorted nciely..now I simply let them scroll.
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prompt is:
"A dreamer is one who can only find his way by moonlight, and his punishment is that he sees the dawn before the rest of the world. "
Oscar Wilde
or
the picture above
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