The forest is so dark today
The sun cannot get through
The trees are keeping light at bay
Whatever shall I do?
I walk alone in shaded wood
I've gone much further than I should
I walk alone
I walk alone
In darkness that's misunderstood
The forest is so dark today
The daylight has no chance
The elves are coming out to play
And faeries come to dance
The twilight grows and closes in
The shadows feel as if they're kin
The twilight grows
The twilight grows
And then the music shall begin
The forest is so dark today
For night has finally come
And now I have been swept away
Upon the elven drums
I start to sway among the trees
Then I begin to dance with ease
I start to sway
I start to sway
Within the magic forest's breeze
Author notes
I was so inspired by Amera's Magic Locket poem that I just HAD to try to write a Trijan Refrain myself!
~Fearylynn
Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com
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400 points, ended December 27, 2007, 23 entries
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Shancy was your judge for the contest… Because of the abundance of entries... we are having trouble getting two scores for each poem...I would just like to thank you anyway for entering and participating in our contest and good luck,
~luminescence
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This is a poem that feels good to read. I must keep comments to a minimum due to the volume of entries. Your score: Title:8 Diction:8 Syntax:8 Wowness factor: 8 Total: 32. Thank you so much for entering and participating. Good luck. Shancy.
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Amazing job here...You my friend, are truly a wonderful poet. You said this is your first time with a Trijan Refrain? You have done it to perfection! I am not good with form poetry, I really admire you for being able to expand your ability as a poet and try new forms, and accomplish them on your first try!!! Great job sweetheart!-Monica
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You did this form very well, very well indeed. I counted your syllables and you are right in target. The image is beautiful and you chose the perfect lines to repeat. It is so sweet of you to mention me in your notes; you didn’t have to do that. Well done my friend, you have the heart of a poet.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you! It means a lot to know you think I did well with it. At the moment its become a bit of an obsession hehehehe.
I just wanted to give credit where credit was due. It was your poem that inspired me, and i thought others should read it.
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i thought you did a good job, and i could see the forest in my head
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Very pleasurable read. You have woven a bit of mystery and sense of magic into your words. I love the form, you seem to have done very well, even if you say it's not your best.
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The forest is so dark today
The daylight has no chance
The elves are coming out to play
And faeries come to dance
The twilight grows and closes in
The shadows feel as if they're kin
The twilight grows
The twilight grows
And then the music shall begin
the middle is the best part. it does not sound forced! i love it.. i really do. i think you did good at it and i would love to read more poems like this
Diamond
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I would reccoment Amera's work then. She has a whole list of Trijan Refrain poetry, and its all very good.
http://allpoetry.com/list/38510-Trijan-Refrain
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It was a pleasure to have been able to read this. It is a delight that you have poured your soul into. And, besides, you are teaching many a new form, well done!
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bravo
This poem is simply wonderful, excellent, magical and perfectly written in every respect! I loved this poem! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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wow thats really good i hope i can do just as good
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