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Fallen angel

Missing image
Fallen angel
Fell from grace
At her own accord
To help the human race
But we didn’t want to be helped
thought we were right

She lies alone
Looking up at the midnight sky
Why is she here
Why did she choose this
A silent tear falls down her cheek
For the suffering of us she weeps

dainty Angel wings
Hidden from our view
But if you really look
It’s not hard to tell

She’s too nice
Too caring
Too understanding and sweet
She has to be an angel she doesn’t belong here
But here she is to stay
Looking over us if we wish it or not

The sparking stars
That she looks up at
Are other angels looking over her
This fallen angel
Is not alone

Author notes

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"Blissful Poison Faerie Nymph"
this is my go at your contest
its not really good though
good luck judeing it

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  • kimmy7
    April 7, 2008
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    OMG THIS IS SOOOO SWEET, I LOVE IT!


  • -Death-s Punchline-
    September 28, 2007

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    "But we didn’t want to be helped
    thought we were right"

    Beautiful write, great job and good luck in the contest.

    jan


  • Angel Of Heaven99
    September 20, 2007

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    I liked this and thought you did a good jobKeep up the great writing and good luck in the contest


  • brightXdarkness
    September 20, 2007

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    okay, a few things for fixing. Just some typos here and there. "Why did she chose this" (choose) And, "She’s too nice
    To caring
    To understanding and sweet" Every "to" in here should really be "too." Other than that, I loved this poem. It flowed with the picture nicely, and the message was just amazing. Do you really believe that there are angels like this one in all of our lives?


  • Coco Mara
    September 19, 2007

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    I actually like it. I think that you portrayed the picture very well and I like the subtle rhyme scheme in it.
    "A silent tear falls down her cheek
    For the suffering of us she weeps " I like this stanza, it seems to sum up alot of the picture and I like how you mentioned that she's not alone at the end.

    Thank you for entering.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    This is really good I like it alot
    She lies alone
    Looking up at the midnight sky
    Why is she here
    Why did she chose this
    A silent tear falls down her cheek
    For the suffering of us she weeps
    Goodluck in the contest sweety.

  • googe
    September 19, 2007

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    beautiful angel your writing is amazing

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