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She's just plain "SHIT" to me.

She showed up at one of my parties.
A shimmering mist,
purple poised upon her smooth,
snow white frame.

In deep low whispers she spoke.

It made everyone hush to hear

Tense, tense, tense,

my instincts froze.

Her aroma cast,

alluring you to inhale.

Soft and flowing,
thin dizzy air, genuinely hypnotic.
  An entourage
clung like psychics,
to her every need.
 
One of her scaly thin companions,
looked me upndown.
 Whispered mockingly,
in her ear,
I could have swore he said,
"Look…my love…fresh meat."
No way, could this be happening to me.
 
My trembling eyes,
look for boyfriend Chad .
Chugging and laughing,
with his boys in the kitchen.
Such a merry sight!
I told myself, “relax”
and thought, what the hell,
who invited them here anyways?
I’m going to go find out!
 
“Did you invite her?”
“Who?" Best bud Marie
looked side to side.
“I pointed again,
HER and ALL of them”

“Oh them, interesting isn’t she,
look at her men,
bound, as if,
in a trance or spell.
 
She’s probably,
one of Billy’s creepy friends,
you know how he collects,
truly “weird ones.”

“I’m glad you brought up Billy,
he really worries me.
He’s been looking like death lately,
and damn so very edgy.
"Do you know what’s going on with him?”
“Billy? Who knows that guy,
is all over the place lately,
I can’t read him at all,”
sighing in disgust.
 
I could feel my stomach race,
hear my senses scream,
my thoughts move faster,
than I could keep pace.
 
“Get her out of here, Get her out of here, right now!”

A strange hiss,
fills the room.
Standing right in front of me,
eye to eye,
is Lady Death.
Hidden was her sensuous aroma,
only piercing stench,
stands before me now. 
 
Peering into my hate filled eyes,
she reaches for the door,
and just like that with all her rats,  
 disappears.
 
On the floor, was Billy…..
zoned out on god knows what,
writhing for the door.
Desperately sobbing,
don’t go….don’t go....
That was it! I had enough!
 
Chad, Marie & I stood guard,
over Billy for one full week.
We locked him in the downstairs bedroom,
each one of us took shifts.
 
He wept, he begged,
he clawed wounds upon his face.
His legs would run in place,
howling for relief.
I used compress,
to try and soothe the pain.
Pleading and pleading,
constantly pleading. 
 
Then the endless vomitting began,
he swore,
we were freezing him to death,
and just as suddenly,
he would demand ice.
 
Accusing us all the while,
that we were burning him alive.
It went on like this
 four long days and nights!
 
We felt like we terrorists
in an unholy war.
 It was on the fourth day,
he was able to stomach chicken broth.
Finally, exhaustedly,
he slept,
all through the night.
 
I  know
who
I
saw
that party night.
It was
truly Lady Death
so carefully disguised.
 
 Street and nick names
are her beat,  
Meth, Crack, Heroin, Speedball.
After What I saw
and
felt this week?
 
She’s just plain "shit" to me.













Author notes

Contest prompt: ears2hearyou
you wanted dark and raw...that's what i gave you,
this one still pierces me with weary realities.

lyrics ..i love lyrics..soft rhyme, contemporary
metaphors..I can turn into dark or fantasy writes.
why participation-growth...and great inspiration from
the other poets.

I don't think you've read this one, it is one of my
very very early writes, when I was new and scared
of this site.

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  • Angelflower
    December 14, 2008

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    Wow granny dear, I really don't know what to say! it's just so.. real! I mean, I think you have struck me speechless!!! Wonderful write!

    Angel


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    This is amazing... what a marvellous write m'dear... oozing with real pain and depth and emotion... the imagery was perfect and the tale so completely intense... just... wow...


  • Rheea gold member
    May 5, 2008
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    this is astounding and so real


  • isabelwk
    May 2, 2008

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    Very well done!

    Love the imagery how the lady of death is at first very seductive, then she slowly changes through the narrative of the poem. Great write.


  • warrior-eagle
    April 29, 2008

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    Wow.
    I am simply amazed.
    This is.... amazing.
    Left me speechless.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • Pebbles
    December 2, 2007

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    Amazing poem!
    Beautiful description.
    I did feel it was slightly long, even though that's not the point.
    Still, it was great!
    Good luck in the contest!
    Pebs


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    October 10, 2007

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    wow..that was excellent...
    This is very well written..The flow of this is just amazing..the words leap from the page..
    The ending is so very powerful..
    Fantastic write..
    Peace
    ~A~


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    September 26, 2007

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    Drugs can be very harsh on you. My dads a drug rehabilitation officer and he has to deal with some with remarkable and very disturbing stories. I have friends that take weed and ecstacy and I just wonder what's the point of it all? It'll kill you if you're not careful, or even if you are. Nicely written.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 20, 2007

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    STUNNING DARK AND TRUE

    STUNNING WRITING HERE. THE 'COLD TURKEY' IS BREATHTAKING THE WAY YOU DESCRIBE EVERYTHING. HIS EMOTIONS CRYING TO BE GIVEN REIEF AS YOU STAND GUARD OVER HIM. AND EACH ONE OF THOSE DRUGS ARE, LITERALLY, LADY DEATH.


    WAYNE
    x


  • Marshall013004
    September 19, 2007

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    hummm......... that was very well written. you are so right about lady death i'm sorry but she is a bitch and your friend should be thankful to have someone like you around to pick him up when he feel off the band wagon. best of luck in the contest........

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