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That Old House

That table once held a vase
of lovely daisy flowers,
a basket of corn muffins
and plates with morsels
of food.

 

Spindly chairs
now collect only dust
instead of the old dirty shirt
that Papa removed
when he came in from the fields.

 

Mama used to read to us
by the light
of that old coal oil lamp
that hung from the ceiling,
and that's where we did our homework
right after chores were done.

 

It was a hard life,
but we slept at night
knowing we had done well
and had done our best
at all we did.

 

It was something
expected of us,
and Mama and Papa
taught us well.

 

Now dust lies
where our lives once lived,
memories are all that's left
of this old house.

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  • poetformerlyknownas gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    This poem made me think of all of the wonderful times I had with my Mom, and the historical places she'd bring us!!! Thank you so much again for sharing this with me!!

  • Malabu
    September 27, 2007

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    Honestly...this is much much much

    better than the two poems above yours...this is a wonderful poem pattyann....beautifully done...congratulations
    Mal


    • pattyann4500
      September 27, 2007
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      Thank you, Malabu. I enjoyed this poem. It made me feel like it was a part of me. You're very kind. Hugs, Patricia

  • Cheroscirit
    September 19, 2007

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    This is really good once again and I like the background. Once again, keep up the good work and Ill ttyl! Love ya!

  • delightfulmess
    September 19, 2007

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    Sigh... I miss my old house. Well done with this piece. I really enjoyed this great job..
    Good luck in the contest.

    delila


    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      Thanks, Delila. I think often of the home I grew up in. Many memories, good and bad, but always something to go back to from time to time. Thank you. Hugs, Patricia

  • captain howdy
    September 19, 2007
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    In my dreams, all the houses I ever lived in are combined into one house. I love your poem!


    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      Thank you, Elizabeth. In my dreams, I'm nearly always stuck in a house I don't wish to be in. Umm, excuse me, I think they call that a nightmare!

  • poetformerlyknownas gold member
    September 19, 2007
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    Aw I like poems like this, it reminds me of a musem (sp?) I like those a lot!! thank you for sharing your fantastic poem! and wonderful luck in the contest!!!

    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      Thank you. This picture has been waiting to be used. I just needed the right contest. Thank you for that. Hugs, Patricia

  • leo2 gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    This so reminds me of my grandparents old home place. Now I know what family and survival are truly all about. They taught their children well. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      I never met any of my grandparents, but I imagine in a place like this--minus the dust. From what I understand about my grandmothers, they were fanatics about a clean house. Thanks, Leo.

    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      Simpler times, Leo. I'd take them in a heartbeat! Thank you. Hugs, Patricia

  • HeavenScent4U
    September 19, 2007

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    wow sis, this was so full of imagery and emotion. it's just like turning pages while reading a book or watch a short skit, so well written. i especially loved.....

    "Now dust lies
    where our lives once lived,
    memories are all that's left
    of this old house."

    Bravo!


    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      Thank you, Sis. I loved this picture so much, and I knew it would be a great inspiration to me. It was. Hugs, Patricia

  • Marshall013004
    September 19, 2007

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    this was great !!! it has so much feeling and meaning to it. it reminds me of stories that i have heard from my grandparents and older peps. the picture helps put it out there and says to you, look at my life it was real . so yes you did wonderful and best of luck!


    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      Thank you. I've been dying to write something for this picture. Since it is similar to memories I have, I was delighted when I found it. Hugs, Patricia

  • cherche -d -ame
    September 19, 2007

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    This sounds so realistic sweetie...if it really was the life you grew up with and are mourning now. The background makes me think of a time that I really do not know....but wish I did...when life was hard indeed [but there really was more to be gained from hard labour than one could imagine] sleep at night, feel great about it and love was shared freely in houses with spindly chairs,
    best wishes my friend, and much love
    xoxoxoxo
    reenie


    • pattyann4500
      September 19, 2007
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      Thank you, Reenie. This does hold some memories for me, although I believe some of it weas the memories I wish I had. We did work hard, and we had little to eat, but I never felt poor. I look at this picture and think of how it must have been left behind by a family much like mine. It's always lovely to see your comments. Love and Hugs, Patricia
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