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afterlight.




sky conceals
a creeping blush,

her claret kiss
charming
star-crossed
pathways through
caliginous sea,

still submerged
in midnight's
afterglow.














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stars on sand.

crimsonfury
[is not sure whether you count hyphenated words as one word or two]

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  • DancingRed
    September 25, 2007

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    Yes, this truly is sublime.

    The word 'afterlight' itself doesn't come up in my dictionary, but I wouldn't have it any other way- a clever neologism captures the feeling of the entire poem so well.
    "caliginous" - I must thank you for directing me to all kinds of new [to me] and wondrous words.
    The alliteration of delicate c sounds gives such a beautiful atmosphere to this little gem.

    And for the record, I usually count hyphenated words as only one word, but anything goes

    Thank you; I really appreciate your entry.
    Endless love.

    DancingRed.


    • crimsonfury
      September 25, 2007

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      i am a strange one. i read the word 'caliginous' somewhere, i forget where exactly. but it stayed in my head, rolling over and over, until i finally had to use it.

      thankyou for your comment!


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    September 23, 2007
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    Hi-5


  • fishbird
    September 19, 2007
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    sublime