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Come Mourning

Hangovers are epitaphs
echoing the short life
of a Saturday Night.

Death
cuts it's way
through dark matter,
as the sun creeps
over apartment buildings.

Fingertips slip
from upholstery.
Dilated eyes
are coined,
left with blank
contemplation.
Remorse simmered
for poison wasted,
potency alongside carbonation
are defused

in a drug smudged glass.

The hangover lingers
with Visine tears
dripping onto desks.
Focus fizzles,
debates
it's purpose.
As the epitaph
continues
head and stomach sink
with that blunt feeling
resting in the dirt.

Memories of bar joviality
crunch at the edges
like leaves swirling
over Saturday Night's
freshly lain grave.

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  • Riftkin gold member
    October 12, 2007

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    this is great, which winning the silver proves.
    What it did not show, is your words takes us on to another place for just a few moments in time.

    Riftkin


  • Danna Hobart
    September 24, 2007
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    Brilliant. Thank you for entering.


  • A60sMan
    September 21, 2007

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    Death
    cuts it's way
    through dark matter,
    as the sun creeps
    over apartment buildings."

    Umm, umm, umm ... that's the Alex I love to read. I'm envious that you figured out how to bring dark matter into your work before me. LOL

    A60sMan


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    Rather nicely done Nutter-Butter, you realize you were totally wasted when I saw you laying on the dance floor? tried to drag you out the side door to the car but the bouncers stopped me, thought I was abducting you I guess? Told them you were my step daughter and the big one said; "For a hundred bucks we'll believe that. " So Nutter, you owe me a C note.

    Cute write gal, and interestingly done.



    Gander