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Proper Victorian Etiquette

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Proper Victorian Etiquette

The beauty of one’s charm, framed by her dress,
enhanced by movements as she walks with grace,
gives air to good breeding, not to excess,
whilst gentlemen notice and stay in their place.
We must grace a room with a soft finesse,
wearing scented perfume with a floral trace.
Follow the rules from the things you learn here
and you will be cherished, I promise you dear.

The question comes up, 'tis not easy to learn;
what should I do with my arms and my hands?
With a bit of practice you will discern,
keep them close to your waist; some ladies hold fans.
Keep your skirt fluffed out, it’s quite a concern,
keep your movements deliberate, follow your plans.
Now wearing your dress you must properly sit,
You must float in the chair as grace will permit.

Next is the step you should never remiss.
Avoid the young man who captures your eye,
you can catch a disease conveyed by a kiss.
Be always polite with a dainty reply.
Let everyone know you’re a sweet young miss.
Keep your hanky ready if you feel you should cry.
The reason for all these rules we have carried
is to find the right man to love and be married.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Answer to: Warning by Jenny Joseph

Ottava Rima:
An Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octives. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme structure:
one octave poem. abababcc
two octave poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octave poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

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  • alexandrathegreat
    October 4, 2007

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    This is very smooth in reading. If I read it out loud I can sway to the rythym you have created. During the second stanza it turns it's cheek a little. I liked that. I love the sarcasm dripping throughout. Great job. Thank you for entering.


  • EvilKate
    October 4, 2007

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    Lyrical and well set, with a tone that really grabs that older, archaic feel of etiquette, which is so rarely seen these days. You stuck to the form well and ticked all the boxes. I liked this, even if it did - in truth - rub against my inner feminist a little


  • seamaiden
    October 1, 2007

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    I was looking at contests and saw this entry in it. This is another delightful work you have written. I like the way this rhymes, it was as graceful as those proper Victorians and their etiquette. You had so much imagery I could see those young ladies acting all prim and proper. The picture you added to it is splendid. I love the floral and pastels in it. Best wishes in the contest. A curtsy for this one. seamaiden ♥


  • Swan song gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    This was a joy to read and the form you chose gives plenty of room for content. Every time I read something of yours I get to go to school This is very lovely


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    September 20, 2007
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    You are just so great!
    What can I say?

    Much Love


  • jo-el
    September 19, 2007

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    you really penned like you know what you speak of and i like that. seems like it came straight from a manual except of course the form is much lovlier. i really enjoyed the warning though...that was hilarius! nice.


  • captain howdy
    September 19, 2007

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    *sigh* all those poor women have to remember to do dainty things, but the men don't have to keep their hands at their waists and carry fans? Or float onto a chair and wear fluffed out dresses that probably aren't comfortable? lol Lovely write!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 19, 2007

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    Too late for you, you're already married. We need a maid, I think... any promising students? I love ottava rima. Like little mini sonnets.


  • micol
    September 19, 2007

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    This has a nicely old-fashioned sense about it, in keeping with subject and form. A certain primness in the speaker, an archness that clearly suggests the distance between speaker and audience, between that time and this.

    One line seems awkward: "The question comes up it’s not easy to learn"--it needs a medial comma after "up," I think; and I'm not sure one learns a question. Other than that one quibble, it a beautifully lyrical piece.

    Good work.


    • Amera gold member
      September 19, 2007
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      Thanks so much, I agree; I added the comma.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    beautiful piece, I love the images you used love you dear!


  • HaleyMary
    September 18, 2007

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    Cool form. I don't think I've read an ottava rima before.
    I think every time I read your poetry I learn a new form that I've never seen before.

    I really loved the ending of this piece. It's something I truly believe in with all my heart. To wait for that special man to come into my life, whoever he may be. But, finding a good man can sometimes be hard to find. Best of luck in the contest. This is my favorite of your poems that I've read so far.

    • Amera gold member
      September 18, 2007
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      Well! Thank you for the wonderful comment. I love it if someone can learn from me. As far as the man goes, hehe... I found mine; getting married in January.

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