We might fly and try the Sun
in old crescent fold together as One
Lie between dark and light on the moon
as a love of flight and light begun;
winds slide softly over silvered dune
light scattered, and red shadow strewn
upon swirling whirling of ebbing tides
and shimmering rays in crescent swoon.
Hearts finding ways to pleasure, rides
upon moonbeams and comet glides
across dark horizon to fall into the sea,
lovers dance upon waves in gracing strides;
and the shy sparkling waters shun
the purpled silver hues of the moon,
where lovers bond and bend as one;
for love glows to burning fire too soon
and falls sway to stung and hurtful prides.
A love song sung slightly out of tune
until the magic is found on both sides;
declared in undying faith for all to see,
‘neath Sun and Moon o'er eternal tides.
We might fly and try the Sun
and in old crescent fold together as One
Author notes
This is an invented form, i think...
Rhyme pattern:
AAba, bbcb, ccdc, aba, bcb, cdc, AA
In a list
A contest entry
- Rhyme 4 - Complex Rhyme Schemes by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended September 28, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Okay, looks better.
Great work.
Thanks for entering, good luck.
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Where's the internal rhyme scheme?
I'm just not seeing it.
The contest required both internal and end line rhyme.
Maybe I'm just not seeing this.
Overall a good poem... let me know if there is internal rhyme-- there is a great possibility I'm just being blind. lol
If you don't let me know, I will just assume there is only end line rhyme.. so be sure to write me back ASAP.
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did a quick revise to add some internal rhyme...PK
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