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Amphetamine Dreams

This mirror distorts my point of view
And the darkness in your face
Where hearts burn in holy fire
And despair the mask I wear
My thoughts of you disperse
Like the high's we used to share

Amphetamine makes a heart skip a beat

It courses in the blood
And makes the truth all blurred
At the edges of my soul
Where my image is nothing but a wraith

That hangs like a blanket of stars
Across this void that grew
Like a cancer that was our love
And the poison that filled us up
Was our drug of pure choice
But it drove us both apart
A division between two lost souls
Where night and day reside
In the gloom that was our lives

So lead me out of here
To a place where I can find
Where the black swans swim on tides
Across the April breezes in my mind
Without the dull gray skies
Reflecting in your eyes
I may seek redemption elsewhere
Beyond your earthly bounds

Yet this pain I hold so dear
Is a craving I cannot bear
For the colour of my heart
Is a sickness that gathers there
It is my own addiction
You are my one affliction
Amphetamine dreams that swell
And remind me of this hell
That was our love

Amphetamine, amphetamine
This glorious amphetamine
Dream

Now the decision has been taken
It's out of my hands now
For this love that culled our souls
Like the distortions of ourselves
We may never awaken from this sleep
That's like a shroud
And fuels this aching need
To an everlasting amphetamine

Amphetamine, amphetamine
This glorious amphetamine
Dream...


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  • Fatal-Addiction
    June 19

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    good write.
    i loved the imagery but i think some was a little over done. but still good and good luck in my contest


  • Jason Smith
    November 27, 2008

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    This poem is a very good write and although, I'll admit, the length is a little tedious it turned out to be worth it just to be able to read this poem.
    Good luck with the contest


  • Coffer
    October 1, 2008

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    This poem makes me think if nothing else, about what it is we are getting ourselves into, about what waits for us in the future, and if I will wake to see the sunrise again. This is a deep poem with a purpose to show how we feed the problem to get temporary relief, but it is worded a bit too strong, giving it the slight cliche feel. This poem could use some work, but keep the same basic message. Thank you for entering.


  • Devient
    June 7, 2008

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    i specifically state no more prewrites accepted at the top of this page. please read directions and guidelines before entering.


  • blemished irises
    May 27, 2008

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    Here goes;

    I really feel like when someone chooses a topic like this it is entirely too easy to slaughter it. You have a couple of good lines but over all this poem was cliche and a tad over done. I feel like I have read this a million times before. It appeals to the majority of angsty teens who crave attention [i.e. some of the girls below this comment] but it is not something that has life or personality. Thank you for entering.

    "Amphetamine is my true heart's desire" That line is cliche.

    "That hangs like a blanket of stars
    Across this void that grew
    Like a cancer that was our love"
    I like that stanza but the line right after that; brought it down a notch. =//

    "I may seek redemption elsewhere
    Beyond your earthly bounds" I love the imagery there.

    " Yet this pain I hold so dear
    Is a craving I cannot bear" That's also cliche.

    "And fuels this aching need
    To an everlasting amphetamine " Removing the word "glory" from that sentence will make it sound better.


  • Little Lottie
    April 5, 2008
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    No one has ever described amphetamines to me and I can't truthfully say that I've done research on amphetamines (the research I do is on heroine...) and you taught me something about that which is something I value in a poem. This was a great write: great imagery, great flow, great energy. This is great. Good luck.


  • HollyxHavok
    March 20, 2008

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    I'm Actually On Amphetamines Right Now...

    I really liked the title that you chose for this, as it is very ironic (sleep is rare on amphetamines... I haven't slept for almost 2 days now... Without sleeping, there IS no dreaming!!!) I don't know if that is the point that you were trying to get across, but it was delightfully ironic and I loved it!!!
    Keep it up, love!

    +[♥]=HollyxHavok=[♥]+

    P♥S♥:You really should consider changing the color of your font... It's awefully hard to read!


  • j-ay rose
    February 3, 2008

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    this reminds me of my ex in a bad way and i am not sure that i can move beyond that bias... i also can't say that i particularly liked the content, but however it will probably be something that a ton of other people will like so keep up the good work and thank you for entering my contest.


  • GhettoBarbiemitbaby
    December 17, 2007

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    exceeded my expectatiions. This is a great write, and I personally know every emotion involved in it, and every fault. This is great write.


  • Ignis Corpus
    November 25, 2007

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    Wow, this poem is over the top when it comes to imagery. You showed me what the story was behind the picture to you instead of describeing to me what the picture was like most people tend to do. Good poem I will say. I didn't see any spelling errors, though I did ask for the poem not to be this long. I will make an acception. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.


  • kIrst1
    November 13, 2007

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    I like this, I've written a poem in speed also, you should check it out. I know how damaging it can be. great poem


  • oldphotosonlybringt
    September 26, 2007

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    ♥

    wow sweetie,

    i loved it bunches of bunches i was blown away the feeling in this poem is so clear amazing wright thanks bunches and good luck..xoxoxox


  • whiterabbit.
    September 19, 2007

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    I really like this and I definitely know how addictive amphetamines can be. I can see the sadness in this. Great job and thanks for entering.

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