Chasing him through fields
Littered with hay bales like sheep
Around and around the maze
Of my mind
Pulsating and vibrating
Running and wanting
Desiring and planning
I want him
I need him
I must have him
Even if my prize
Comes through
The chilled claws
Of death
I will hunt him
I will watch him
I will get him
Even if my prize
Comes through
The chilled claws
Of death
I want him
I need him
I must have him
Obsession
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good..short..to the point..lacks action..metaphor..and any poetic element..but fit the title well..obsession..short lived..and narrow minded...good write
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Great!
Very simple, very clear, very to the point! Great job, good luck.
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WOW
This was very straight forward and VERY well written
Short, quick, to the point and sends shivers downt the spines of readers.
CONGRATS!
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this was well written and self explanatory? you have talent thanks for the entry and good luck =]
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This indeed is obsession and some pretty damn harsh stuff too. I loved the repetition of one of the verses and the I want, I need and the such. The urgency comes across nicely.
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whoa.
that was god. catured the creepiness of obsession and love. great read. thanks!
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this is really good
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