My love you have stolen my heart,
I swear I feel you living there.
You have stolen my hands babe,
to touch anyone else they will not dare.
You are etched deep in my mind,
thoughts of others I can not find.
You have my body wanting you,
It trembles every time I think of you.
You own my lips yes you do,
to give tender kisses to only you.
You have all of me for your own,
this feeling inside I have never known.
You have even stolen my eyes,
it is for you my love they cry.
I love you more than you can know,
this is why I miss you so.
Author notes
very new but painful love
option 1
A contest entry
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Very good poem. Thanks for entering the contest!
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Please read the rules before entering.
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Thank you for your beautiful and heartfelt entry, I so agree love is painful,Josephine
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aww love can be a painful thing, you have shown that through this piece. thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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Awww, this is a very bittersweet write. I love the emotion you express in this because it is
subtly (<--is that even a word?) passionate and at the same time sad. Great job on the rhyme as well. It flowed so well I didn't realize you were rhyming until I read it again lol That's great, means your rhymes sound natural and not forced. Thanks for following the ONLY rule and adding your muse to your author notes! Thanks and good luck! -
Love does feel that way,but what sweet surrender.
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I've just read your profile page. Wow, very rough life you had. I hope that there were some bright spots as well. I have found that writing is therapy for a lot of people and I hope you find it a healthy addiction. Belated welcome to AllPoetry, stop by my joint http://allpoetry.com/earthtojim for some laughs chuckles and a wee bit o' serious stuff, as well. See you around, Jim
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this is really good i like it alot
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Plain, straightforward showing love and delight. Nice piece of romantic poetry that hits the spot. Thanks for sharing.
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Stolen?
Hee hee sounds more like a willing gift to me
This is cute, touching and romanctic. Rhyming is well done also. Well done my friend and God bless you, Mark
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Wonderful write. I enjoyed your words. I thank you for posting this one so I could read it.
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Good job. I love it. Only one thing. And that is that you said:
"It trembles everytime I think of you."
I think that is:
"It trembles every time I think of you."
No? Yes. Glad you concur... That's all.
~Asa of the Poets of Infection -
Fantastic
Wonderful poem Momma. A brilliant love poem. I am so happy to come across it. It seems it has written using my words. It is so familier and impressive. It truly reveals the feelings of being in love. Keep it up.
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good write! good write!!
i am not one to give advise, (maybe i am) but in my opinion, as far as YOU living there, GET YOUR OWN PLACE!!! and didn't you mean it every time? there ain't nothing worst then a liar and a theif. and they truck together... love gypsyfish. good write
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Aww, terribly sad. But a beautiful message well-written Really enjoyed it! Best of luck, and keep up the awesome work!! =D
Salaam (peace)!!
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