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Maybe

I'm watching your back, yet again,
as you walk away from me,
This time it's over, I'm done with men,
But I dont think thats the right word,
You are not a man, your a little boy,
who cant understand how he feels,
or maybe just cant show it,
Maybe i'm just tired of being told one thing,
and you prove to me another,
Maybe i'm tired of loving you,
and all it causes me is pain,
maybe I'm tired of fighting,
because I actually have emotion,
and I have no problem showing them,
I mean you love me remember?
Then why dont you love me when I'm sad?
Why don't you lvoe me when I'm angry?
Why don't you love me when I'm not how you say I should be?
Why do you only love me when I'm happy?
and living up to your expectations?
Am I your barbie?
Because thats how I feel...
Or maybe that't just me being "overemotional" again,
right baby?

What do you really think?

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  • xblakxrosexremainsx
    September 25, 2007

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    Id say...

    Good!
    u really expressed ur feelings! i liked it tho. it made me thing.
    it'd have been better if it had a rhyme or at least a rythim.... but its still really good


  • foreverxnow
    September 25, 2007

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    this is amazing! it doesn't rhyme, which normally puts me off poems like that, but this held me captivated. it makes me feel like it has happened to me. Good job!! =]


  • Shikamaru-Nara
    September 25, 2007
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    I'm not sure whether I should be offensive about the guy, or defend him.

    Good write


  • I will stand by you
    September 25, 2007

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    this is a good write. some times a man can't understand how much it hurts us women that they can't love us when we aren't the happy person. THis is very good.


  • kelix
    September 25, 2007

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    Great write full of raw feelings and emotions. I know this feeling and can identify the type of guy your talking about. Thats the problem with love, it hurts sometimes
    Good write - thanks for sharing


  • The Last Truth
    September 21, 2007

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    This is a hard poem for me to comment on cause i'm a guy, but i like and i see the truth in what you say....but More important then that i see that your and amazing poet!!!!!


  • The Imperfection
    September 20, 2007

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    is this about ur jackass ex?

    i love it! i love how u always make lables and barbies seem so evil (which they r!) this was my fav part:
    "Then why dont you love me when I'm sad?
    Why don't you lvoe me when I'm angry?
    Why don't you love me when I'm not how you say I should be?
    Why do you only love me when I'm happy?
    and living up to your expectations?"

    make more! i love it! high 5!


    • JadeNikole
      September 20, 2007
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      Yeah its about him...and it describes how we was to me perfectly

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