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My Magic Box

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My Magic Box

I came upon a magic box
It opened with a magic key
I knew the box was meant for me
‘Twas pointed out by Mister Ox

It was a gift from Misses Fox
And it was plain as you can see
I came upon a magic box
It opened with a magic key

I found it underneath the rocks
Within, a loving heart, you see
The heart made all the people free
My key then opened up its’ locks
I came upon a magic box

 

 

 

 

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by: Amera
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Rondel:
A French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows:
ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats. 

Art work by: ElyonHeart

 

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  • And Hyetal
    December 17, 2007

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    Still randomly clicking...

    This was cute! I love your interpretation of the picture!

    Your rhyming was great, and I like this form. I should try it some time!

    Always,
    Cassie


  • Tarja
    December 1, 2007

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    YES SAILOR MERCURY KICKS ASS!! Although... Sailor Jupiter kicked even more ass but oh well! I loved this piece it was so original and well written! Nice job!


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    September 22, 2007

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    I really liked this very much. My daughter did too. She likes the background too. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • Swan song gold member
    September 21, 2007
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    I like it! Doyou know where any others are?


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 21, 2007
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    Such a beautiful write, so lovely and perfect for all children, well done and good luck!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 19, 2007

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    This is fantastic and reminds me of a poem I wrote called, "My Ship's Come In". I love this beyond words.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 19, 2007

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    this is a great and awesome piece amera dear

    and yay sailor mercury!


  • Shofar-Quill
    September 18, 2007

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    Beautifully cleaver...

    Oh I just love the way you use diversified styles with their appropriate names and forms! You did creatively marvelous on this one.

    Cheers, ~Milly


  • They Say Shannon
    September 18, 2007

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    "Within, a loving heart you see"
    I think that there should be a comma after 'heart' seperating it from 'you see.'

    This was cute. :]
    I like the little story line, and for the most part, the repetition in this form works nicely.

    Great job and thanks for entering. :]
    Good luck! <


    • capricornpoet
      September 19, 2007
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      It could have gone without a comma,as
      saying"within a loving heart you see"in one breath..but then if it means "within, as a pause..the comma's needed..lol ..I think the comma fits, here.


    • Amera gold member
      September 18, 2007
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      humm... I think you're right. Fixed it!


      • They Say Shannon
        September 18, 2007
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        :]


        By the way,
        I love the name, "Amera."
        Just thought I'd point that out. <3


  • Moons Lunar Angel
    September 18, 2007

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    Wow you are a creative genious Excellent poetic devices.
    Lil

  • capricornpoet
    September 18, 2007

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    lovely

    A fun rhyme with a tale to tell of a magic box..
    Lovely imagery as the tale follows..wonderful happy ending..made me smile.


  • sunny day
    September 18, 2007

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    This was as magic as the box that the key did open and shared the beauty of what was inside. A loving heart to light the world and all who inhabit it. I haven't seen a rondel for a while and this was beautiful. A lovely fairytale you painted with your words and it leaves me warm and smiling. You are a magician and always pull amazing pieces of poetry out of your hat. The rhythm and rhyme are superb which made it flow softly from the page to my heart. Best wishes in the contest. It's absolutely delightful. Love you my friend, Joyce


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 18, 2007

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    Amera, ahhhh me cubbie your Elves will love this as well as everyone else, reminds me of a Disney movie ya know? very sweet and well done, you have unlocked the magic of our hearts with this write.



    Dad

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