After playing in dream:
yawning abyss awoke
summer’s seed sowed --
sweet murmur’s glimmer
on fate’s horizon…
our vestal fire’s flower.
Author notes
for My most beautiful white raven
prompt: summer seeds
20 word poem
the unknown poet1
A contest entry
- Quickie Cult - Invite Yourself - Round 1 by DancingRed.
300 points, ended September 25, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this poem. The images in this are brilliant, coupled with great alliteration and compact emotion.
Thank you; I really appreciate your entry.
DancingRed.
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Stunning, I am a huge fan of poetry thats a bit different, and this was, but it was beautiful and its sometimes hard to get both right.Well done and thank you for sharing.
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First of all, awesome title! That is what drew me to click on this piece.
For a very short poem, given the "quickie contest" situation, you captured what needed to be heard. Each word in every line is most applausable. I couldn't find anything out of place, nothing to give you any criticism on at all. Great job! Good luck in the contest.
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The short, compact feel of this really grabs the imagination majorly. Keep penning -
as always my sweet, you did a great job on this piece.
wonderful take on this prompt.
im sure your Raven will enjoy this read.
Great job
always
Tory -
Beautifully said. An intriguing take on the prompt that shows brilliant imagery and a creative side thought.
Much luck
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Ever since I found out what a fire flower is I like the picture Lovely poem...it always amazes me what is possible to contain in only 20 words!
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Very nicely done for the same prompt. I see we both had the sowing summers seeds on our minds..
And I knew looking at mine it shouldnt be sewing, Now I gotta go change it
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