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hřbitov.

hřbitov. 

 

 

 

i dreamt of warm bread, a stomach of pleasantry. i dreamt of promises, our covenants. you opened up my soul, like the window and the curtains' bloody wail. you rolled away my stone, and found i wasn't home these days. i'd been resurrected. my heart's an empty core, an empty drawer with littered letters, little settlements of emotion. and you walked away with nothing, and i'm sorry for the vacancy. i'm sorry for the legacy. so long. be well.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • brevity
    September 25, 2007
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    bueno

    it feels unresolved, but i suppose that's the point.
    megusta.


  • thelovesongwriter
    September 20, 2007

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    wtf!!! this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    wow. that was good.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 19, 2007
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    I totally missed this -


  • spine
    September 19, 2007

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    Shana Tova

    I loved this.

    "you opened up my soul, like the window and the curtains' bloody wail. you rolled away my stone, and found i wasn't home these days"

    I think you might just be my favorite poet on allpoetry

    I am just in love with any piece you write!

    • marrow
      September 19, 2007
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      Wow, I am really very honored. I don't know what to say other than that. Thank you.


  • Phineas Red
    September 18, 2007
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    A piece of, shall i say, "biblical" proportions? ha ha ha. I'm so clever. I liked it very much.

    • marrow
      September 18, 2007
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      You silly kid. Now shut up and celebrate Rosh Hashanah with me.


  • Doug Cundall
    September 18, 2007
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    not your best but i like it.


  • Freestyle Bushido
    September 18, 2007

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    I just really love the way pen emotions and imagary on to paper. Truly an experimental piece with alot to say and all in all a brilliant poem.


  • singingfreedom
    September 17, 2007

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    Normally any poem that isn't written in some form of poetic form I barely glance at, but this I really like. It's full of imagery that's powerfully poetic and demands to be re-read to get the full effect of it. Good write.


  • RachelSchuyler
    September 17, 2007
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    this was really interesting. i like the image you painted. you have a talent in that area...

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