Pandora opened her mythical box,
I wish it would've been filled with pretty colored rocks
and ever since the clock's
been ticking for us stupid mortals
all because she opened the portal
to Hell,
well,
isn't that damn swell?
The fairy of hope,
was the weed called dope
yum,
so i'll go smoke some
but damn she was dumb!
Author notes
I was reading the story of "Pandora's Box", and thought of this. here's the link if you're interested...
http://www.geocities.com/una_sorella/stories/pandora.htm
Please tell me what you think
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lol, a humorous piece this is XD
i like how the point of this poem is original because this is the first time i've seen someone write about their opinion on the mistake of pandora in opening the box ^^
all in all, this is an interesting one to read for me. simple, short and straightforward, pretty much you did well
keep up the good work!
and cheers or more like an applause from me to you..
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You did a great job with this write. Pandora and her wicked box. We must be careful as to what we do, thinking first is a must.
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cute
. very cute I just got a Pandora bracelet, its so cool! We got my mum one for her birthday today!
Great poetry
great punctuation!
I love this, maybe add a little more of yourself thought, of who you are
Keep up the great work
Pandora
Pandora opened her mythical box,
I wish it would've been filled with pretty colored rocks
and ever since the clock's
been ticking for us stupid mortals
all because she opened the portal
to Hell,
well,
isn't that damn swell?
The fairy of hope,
was the weed called dope
yum,
so I'll go smoke some
but damn she was dumb!
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this is pretty cute really. Your rhyme scheme was clever and it made me smile. I didn't need the link because I've read the story already.
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right on
ya pandora was on hell of a dumb ass she cursed mortal man do die so now we all have to deal with death because of her i have read the story myself and you did a great job at capturing the escnce of pandora's mistake keep up the great work don't stop writting. -
Different kind of rhythm and rhyme in these lines - cute interpretation of the story. We do not know what is in store, and can only make the choices that we think are right, although sometimes we makes them anyway, knowing that they are wrong.
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You are absolutely correct on this one. But as you know, hindsight is 20/20, and I wonder how many mistakes we would have avoided, had we only known the outcome first.
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Oh man that one made me laugh. Very good.
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this is really gawd, with a good moral.
XD
"and ever since the clock's
been ticking for us stupid mortals
all because she opened the portal"
love that bit
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Lol. Good write.
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thanks
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