The Night is a Symphony:
Dusk breaks.
The gentle strumming of the clouds
Echoes to the corners of the sky.
Chimes of twilight break through
And reverberate on the horizon.
Cymbals sing as the sun vanishes,
And the deep chords of the black sky
Begin their ethereal charade.
Low, melodious tones drift between
The pinging dewdrops of stars,
Cascading across the ever open dark.
A violin lightly tweaks as a falling star
Slides between chorus and verse.
The crescendo of anticipation billows,
clouds toss and turn, the sky flashes.
The cello rains down, beating
A climactic hope for dawn across the world.
Then it settles.
The mist sings quietly
And the harp, heavy with dew,
gently raises the sun.
~9/17/07~
Author notes
used the crescendo of anticipation prompt.
A contest entry
- PIF: Many prompts to choose from! by SolidSnark.
450 points, ended September 24, 2007, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I keep reading this one, and I just picture this beautiful storm. I know, you never thought -I- would find a storm beautiful..but it is. This is written well. The fact that I was in band kind of helps to get the sounds right. Haha But it really does bring to mind a magnificent storm. I love you, honey. Keep writing.
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I read this poem again and I think I love it more and more every time. I dunno how you wove so many lovely words and images into one flowing poem, but you did. Hey you rock! Please write something else Doug, it kills me that you have put down your pen. You have such a talent, don't let it go to waste!
~Cheers~
Melvina
P.S- Find your muse! -
your use of descriptions and the words you chose to use, made this a well written piece
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great use of musical terms to describe someting so simplistic and beautiful. you truly have captured it in a awsome light my friend. keep it up.
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This is really excellent! I love the imagery of instruments used against that of night ending and dawn coming.
It's a very creative take on the prompt and very well written.
Thanks for the entry and best of luck!
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The words go together well... I like the topic...I liked the words that you used...
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baby I love this one. Really I do... just the word pinging doesn't fit as well with the other words. I will keep that in the back of my mind and let you know if I can think up another word. But other than this poem rocks my socks off.... but oooo I'm not wearing socks! kk, I love you hun.
~cheers~
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