Circles, Circles around my head
Running circles nearly dead
Back and forth
Around and around
Lose my balance
Fall to the ground
Mostly dead now
Here on the floor
Dizzy, Spinning
Searching for more
The ground so cold, so cold
Here my time will grow old
Circles, Circles around my head
Running circles mostly dead
Better now three days cold
Under the ground
In the casket
No heart beat, no sound
So here I lay
Here I'll stay
With circles, circles around my head
Running circles now I'm dead
Author notes
Just a poem that I wrote this morning. Please don't tell me that you hate it...Tell me how to fix it. Thank you
A contest entry
- PIF: If You Like It Vague, Click Here by Artemis Gem.
700 points, ended September 23, 2007, 8 entries
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Comments
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wow I can so relate to this one. i write stuff like this all the time
So here I lay
Here I'll stay
With circles, circles around my head
Running circles now I'm dead
nice yet dark ending. open ended.
keep it up!
pegleg -
I like this one em, But rarely if not never have I disliked one of your poems.
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