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Till death do I part

The highest peaks I sought
  Lowest valleys I've tread
  Frigid moments I've endured
  Sweltering times I've stayed

The times I've lived
  Life I sought
  Finality abrupt
  Failures unforeseen

I wasnt ready
  Was in too deep
  So wholly empty
  was Blind to reality

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Kind of a work in progress, i need a little artistic/creative nudge

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  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    April 13
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    I like it,does it tell of something that was once so firm and strong,and now it's fallen apart?

  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    November 18, 2007
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    Wow this poem has electricity

    I got a shock...the title's unique and interesting..words like:

    The times I've lived
    Life I sought
    Finality abrupt
    Failures unforeseen

    these are very good...i like it...

    I wasnt ready
    Was in too deep
    So wholly empty
    was Blind to reality

    the ending here is exquisite..
    wow this poem is THUMBS UP!


  • a woman to love
    September 17, 2007

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    we often time cannot not see what is right infornt of us...I hope that you shall find what you are looking for and maybe then you will come upon a you you never knew existed. good work here

  • woodstock 69
    September 17, 2007
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    Hmm, artistic creative nudge? O.o
    What is it of? Maybe I can help >.>