I'm tired-yet I still wish to be
yet no one sees my inner battle to succeed
I want to live
yet I am dead
My soul is dead
but mind thrives to succeed
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Keep fighting! Never give up! There's something great in store for you, that's why the battle. Excellent musing! I do hope you pen something new for 2008.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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You can be dead in your heart and soul and spirit but you still live. I know this feeling, that inner battle is hard, I know. The background doesn't really fit such a sad poem, its too cheery
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great
love your distancing mind from soul. very smart. hope you manage to suceed!!!
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Wonderful
Ur poem is wonderful. I speaks to me. Sorry Emo and Gothic am I. lol... -
the starting line (I'm tired-yet I still wish to be) is fantastic. perhaps you could What a great piece of work! use a little more punctuation in your work. your ending line was really good, its sums up your piece of work really. 5 start for effort!
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