I call him gorgeous, though I've only seen his facial profile and a good shot of his anatomy to confirm his sex.
Bruised ribs and cracked lips are only two of many small prices to pay for bearing the brunt of creating a new existence (or a new social security number--oh, you statisticians). Said small prices will soon be forgotten after a day of laborious meltdowns and the new acquaintance of an old friend.
Oh, that day. Pregnancy imprints an abstract impression of existence: one can acknowledge an existence within (that existence which causes the aforementioned bruised ribs), but can't seem to understand this existence has hands, feet, knees, elbows, internal organs (how I hope you're all there), and so on. This "existence" is, incidentally, a liter-sized person. Maybe a little bigger than that. In any case, it's a person. It's ridiculous.
When will you show up? I'm counting down the days and hours until I meet you, as though I actually knew when you would come. I need the confirmation of your existence to achieve a confirmation for a purpose of my own. Please, show me, show me, show me.
A contest entry
- Of Prose and Poets by By A New Name.
300 points, ended September 22, 2007, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is really good. haha. I'm feeling that way about mine right now... omg, I'm ready to meet my baby so badly. And I'm having a little boy... I'm so excited!
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I really liked this, the borth of a little person, awh!
It was beautifully penned prose, excellent work
thank you for entering and good lucl..xxx
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aw, this is so wonderful. I really love it. I just adore the lines:
I need the confirmation of your existence to achieve a confirmation for a purpose of my own. Please, show me, show me, show me.
I think those hold so much truth. This is great. Thanks for entering.
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WOW, WOW, WOW
This was great. What a wonderful look at the anticipation. If you are expecting, congratulations and good luck, if not, you nailed it on the head! This is fantastic! -
good luck with the new life,sleep when they sleep!
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I can so relate to this.
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This is an absolutely beautiful piece! I've never heard a mother-to-be describe her experience like this before. The reader can feel your anticipation, which is awesome. My only criticism is sentence near the end that sounds kind of awkward: "...as though I actually knew when you would come." The tense is kind of skewed here and it makes the sentence feel weird. But other than that, it's a wonderful piece.
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I like this
graphic ideas of what it must be like and of the longing for the waiting to be over.
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An emotional and creative perspective on the impending motherhood that is already there. Well done. Congrats.
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'the road of excess leads to the palace of wisdom' william blake
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Glad you won Gold trophy for this. For me the use of the word existence seems to overpower the intense feelings pictured by you. But, nevertheless, a noble peroration and a beautiful expression of the wonder of pregnancy.
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