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Diary

The unopened diary lies,
Writing onto itself,
Telling its owner's life,
To eyes unknown.

Secrets revealed,

Lies unearthed,

Still the diary writes,

Till the time has come.

 

Shaking now,

The diary sleeps,

In it's own solitude,

It closes and weeps.

 

When the owner awakens,

It has no choice,

Write... Just write,

Saddened, the diary sighs.

 

It tells the tales,

The owner unknown,

Eyes scanning,

Anger erupting.

 

So now the diary is shut,

The owner now knows,

No regrets anymore,

Burned, the diary dies.

 

Keeping his life in check,

The owner smiles,

He goes to sleep,

And continues to kill.

 

The ashes disappear,

Hinges replaced,

The diary is back,

To continues its work.

 

The owner sneaks,

The diary narrates,

Words dancing across paper,

With no pencil in sight.

 

Parents find the mystical book,

Deciding now to take a look,

A record from day one,

Until the final day is done.

 

Parents unhappy,

Truths made published,

The diary continues to write,

Forever refreshed.

 

Thirty-odd years later,

The diary now written by hand,

"These were my problems,"

Over the years, of time's sands.

 

"I'm the culprit,

I'm to blame,

But not only I,

But you too."

 

Th diary closes one final time,

The owner now lies,

The coffin full,

The owner smiling.

 

A note on the lifeless diary,

Now forever known,

Decides the fate,

To be kept or thrown.

 

"Read my life,

Know my secrets,

I've no regrets,

I've nothing to hide."

 

The family now curious,

They begin to read,

The pages blank,

From start to finish.

Author notes

MY AP NAME: Darkwave Das Ich

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Comments

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  • Kikai Ni
    November 20, 2008
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    In the beginning, it seems like you blur the line between owner and diary. That the writing continues even after the lies and secrets have been revealed suggests that the writing wasn't done to reveal; it was done because it had to be.
    I love the role you assigned the diary. It makes me feel sad for my own.
    I hope you do not try to improve upon this for it is perfect as it is.


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 19, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    Unfortunately it is way over the line limit and everyone was giving fair warning that poems would be removed that are over the line limit.



    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment



    Happy Halloween and God Bless
    Tammy


  • lordmalvok
    January 3, 2008

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    Thought provoking. Interesting how the diary wipes away the mans sins and secrets after he comes to grips with them.

    "Read my life,
    Know my secrets,
    I've no regrets,
    I've nothing to hide.

    The family now curious,
    They begin to read,
    The pages blank,
    From start to finish."

    Excellent work. I can tell you've put a lot of effort into this, and it's payed off.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    October 24, 2007

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    Excellant

    Wow, a most intriguing write indeed, my friend. I find I can relate to what you've expressed here even tho I've never kept a diary. Very well written indeed.


  • xblakxrosexremainsx
    October 23, 2007

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    Amazing

    this poem is GREAT its full of thoughts and feelings.
    i was amazed the entire it.
    there are many parts that got stucked into my mind... they made me think.
    you must have worked hard on this one.
    you have a great talent keep writing like that.

    i loved the entire poem but this part specially:
    "The owner sneaks,/
    The diary narrates,/
    Words dancing across paper,/
    With no pencil in sight"

    Amazing and wonderful GREAT GREAT job


  • xxTheRadFreakxx
    September 18, 2007

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    wow, this is turly an amazing poem, i don't think you should change anything i love how it sounds and how it readys, i really love part(s)





    Shaking now,

    The diary sleeps,

    In it's own solitude,

    It closes and weeps.

    .....



    "Read my life,

    Know my secrets,

    I've no regrets,

    I've nothing to hide."




    .....


    i think those parts are the most uhh wuts the word, impacting, they just read so good, but any aways, good good write,!


    xoxo the radfreak

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