x--- an orphanage for ideas that will find a good home one day
x--- that place in the garden where anything's allowed grow
x--- a plastic container in the fridge for left-overs
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[Sat Sep 15 8.00pm]
seeds spiralled
from fate's fingers
in paths of
dropping bombs;
swallowed thick in
sandy soil
we thought it was
suicide
but you burst
from death
like calligraphic
strokes of green
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[Sun Sep 16 7.30pm]
stars are fiery lips
of a goddess
sucking darkness
away as if they
were drawing poison
from primeval wounds
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[Mon Sep 17 1.18pm]
happiness
is a deathless disease
to which there's
no known cure /i
haven't been vaccinated
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[Tue Sep 18 2.40pm]
poppy:
he flirted with the fiery wind
and danced to sunset’s kiss
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[Wed Sep 26 am]
snake...
...enveloped itself in the wood pile,
as though it were a disgusting, dangerous lie;
scales glinting in the glaring sun
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[Wed Sep 26 pm]
i could not sleep.
stars hung like hackneyed carcasses slumped over the hump of wednesday. the constellations draped themselves in arrangement of summer christmas lights, but dangled limp like hippos wallowing in mud, horses melting in memory.
humidity
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[Sat Sep 29 10am]
brother
i.
i like to think he would have been a bird;
wings that would flutter sighs
he would sing
in the wind
ii.
when the sun split
& death came close
there was no time for drawn-out goodbye;
wings folded over his small face
and he melted
faster than snowflakes on concrete.
somewhere there is a bird brother
sleeping in a box of wide eyed grief
iii.
your fingers weren’t enough to catch him,
father.
(critique welcome, but be nice; i feel sad today.)
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Author notes
I daresay this page will exponentially increase.
Kudos to the lovely Neon Twilight and her lovely page of ideas: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3408012
Background by me! First background I've made here. I used my photo: http://dancingred.deviantart.com/art/black-and-white-paths-48028061
Ask my permission before you used this background, thanks.
In a list
critique welcome.
Comments
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Wow... th eimagery, the ideas presented here are just SUPERB. I wish I could give you a million clappies, this really should be published... It's flourishing with feeling and I don't hav a single suggestion that could make this better!
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Your scrap pile is a better read than a lot of homepages on here lately. What a plethora of inspiring reads. Kudos and keep em comin'
A
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Wow, cudos to "Neon Twiligh" for this idea .. these "snippets" are fantastic ... I loved the ideas & phrasing you were able to incorporate ... the last one was my favourite ... so sad but incredibly well written. Good luck, keep at it.
Ryan
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Bravo!!!
Completely original and very personal. I love the abstractness...
As I said, Bravo! Effin' bravo.
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Ahhh... can't believe these are quickie snaps and snippets, scraps and pieces from your mind!! They ar perfect. I love them. I love the poppy one. Too cool. And the "stars are..." you are a genius
*hugs Hannah* *bounces away*
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I am so sorry. Love you sis... [ I don't really have words] I am here if you neesd to talk.
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Love the [Sun Sep 16 7.30pm] one. Hmm, maybe I should copy you and Esha. Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
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haha, I lov eit:
happiness
is a deathless disease
to which there's
no known cure /i
haven't been vaccinated
Great idea! I think I might have to steal it. My notebook just isn't cutting the mustard.
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hahah who's poppy ... ? i call my father that when i am fooling around.
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'tis a flower. but perhaps symbolic of some grandfather figure who died in war...
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i knew it's a flower poppy seeds are used for drugs ... but i thought it'd b a person... nice -hey wait a minute how come i don't know your name yet?
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hannah Hannah HANNAH! There, now you know.
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khek khek just increasing your points i do that to everyone... not really. yes me is Esha... the one and only[no it's a very common name in asia].
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I impulsively click the five stars, even if they belong to someone else..
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YAY... i like being the one and only
gives me an ego boast. take care babes... me has to rush!
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Yup. My suspicions are true. You ARE weird. And what's with you and names? I'm the one whose supposed to have a name fetish around here, and even I don't interrogate people like you do. tsk tsk
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Grrrrrrrr x.x
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ta-ta gorgeous.
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Aww... this is beautiful! I mean three of the above entries so far
I am booking to read more
-Esha
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