A jealous rage comsumes me.
A blade in hand
The beautiful metal
Meets with my skin
The trail of lies come one by one
just one cut
leads to another
The tile floor now Flooded with blood
*What
*Do
*I
*Have
*To
*LOSE
It's not like these scars on my wrist
Will actually fade.
It's not like this immature heartbreak
Might go away.
The way you left ME
For HIM
On a whim
Because of "My Mental Instability"
YOU left your love For a Narcissistic F.U.C.K
Cut to Cut...it's all your fault
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A contest entry
- Make Me Perfection by adsaige.
600 points, ended October 12, 2007, 18 entries
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Your poems get stuck in my head, and just don't leave. They strike at my heart, and for a fleeting moment I feel as if I know how you felt at the time, and the sensation becomes overwhelming.
This is amazing, angel! Keep up the amazing writes. -
Whoa baby! Hang on and dont fall off! BEAUTIFUL.
Warmest,
Mylee -
wow i love it so much power and emotion the way you pull the reader along faster and faster than just stop is amasing i love this peice
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emotional and deep keep it up
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WOW
This Shows So Much Emotion,,It's Great,,Yur Such An Awesome Writer,,I'm Jealous,, LOL
xXx
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i love this. so raw and beautiful
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Judged
There is raw anger in these short lines that flared and snapped out at any and everyone who reads it--like a curse, beg for atonement...it chills me. I see you used the capitals words to focus on that word in particular, but I'm not sure if you should've used it on so many, remember you have to flatter your words yes, and to be soft on the reader's eyes, even if your impact is not.
Thank you for entering and good luck. -
this...is...amazing...
so angry, but beautiful as well
i love it
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