Let's go back to the beginning
Back when things were just fine
Your once innocent actions
Had always kept you on my mind
But to like someone that much
Had driven me insane
Back when the slightest touch
Took away all the pain
But when we got much closer
I despised all that wait
When you didn't seem to care
Is what I'd really hate
One minute you're prince charming
And then you'd tell these lies
It must've been alarming
When you were the one left behind
I guess you'd call this the "middle"
It's when we start to fade
You've seemed to change rapidly
Starting your own little charade
Yet to love someone that much
Really drove me insane
And when the simplest touch
Still took away the pain
The lies started to build up
Till I was left with tears
I had this last decision
One of my greatest fears
You'd act like you're prince charming
But you had crossed the line
I hope it was alarming
For you to know you were left behind
We never ended with a closure
We never even said good-bye
I knew for a fact it was over
By the tears I used to cry
I never got to tell you this
I always let everything slide
But I still can't reach the bliss
[Because I've got all this locked inside]
A contest entry
- Your love life by Lilyflowersinspring.
450 points, ended September 24, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your 1st Love, What Went Wrong? by XxXxSilentXxXx.
300 points, ended October 3, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
yeah.
Comments
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Good luck in the contest!
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I like the flow in this poem and how you were able to make everything rhyme. Another part that I liked was that you really kept to what you wanted the message to be. I was able to understand it clearly. The title also states everything that you are stating in this poem.
For some reason I love the last line, for it just trully makes the whole poem, and that is how I sometimes feel when i'm thinking about something and feel I can't really say it outloud.
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awesome!!
ahhh i lovelovelove this poem Mandalicious! reading it brought me back to uhhm certain memories let's say anddd it sure as hell musta brought you back a long way, too. but it also makes you realize just how far we've both really come in this last year.
*Yet to love someone that much
Really drove me insane*
those are my favorites lines. EVERRR. ohmygod. i dont even have to say anything, haha, you can guess what i'm feeling right now i'm sure =D
*And when the simplest touch
Still took away the pain*
those are amazing lines, too. they speak so much truth its scary. but there's such beautiful images that come to mind with those lines...yeah my comment's a bit different today i really am feeling creative! haha
*I hope it was alarming
For you to know you were left behind*
ohhh i'm sure for them it was. cause we were the only real and best things they've ever had, lost, and won't ever get again. sucks for them hahahaha\
AMAAAZING POEM!! i loveee it a lot =) thanks for showing it to me fool! it took a lot of strength to post this on here. keep writing, don't ever stop, you'll reach out to so many different people through your writing, i know it!!
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