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Magic Locket

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Magic Locket

There's a wood nymph in my pocket
I keep her close to me
Around her neck a golden locket
For everyone to see
I know magic; and so does she
She stays close and watches me
I know magic
I know magic
The golden locket has a key

There's a wood nymph in my pocket
I only show a few
When the key goes in the sprocket
Just watch what it can do
I turn the key when it goes in
And then the room will start to spin
I turn the key
I turn the key
The magic starts and then I grin

There's a wood nymph in my pocket
She’ll never fly away
But she’s quick, just like a rocket
I saw her fly one day
The magic key will make me strong
I’ll rule the world, it won’t be long
The magic key
The magic key
So won’t you come and sing my song?

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Option #2 - A locket

 

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Harlequin Bunny
    May 30, 2008

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    This is a fascinating style of poetry, and while I peruse Shadow Poetry frequently for new styles, I've never read about it! You've done a masterful job here, and the story is quaint, and whimsical, and very very enjoyable!


  • Tarja
    November 5, 2007
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    First, congrats on the gold! What an interesting and STRICT style of poetry! It looks pretty tough and you did a wonderful job! I loved the format and of course the subject of the poem was just enchanting. Well done! Thanks so much for entering and good luck!


  • Fearylynn
    September 21, 2007
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    Congratulations!!!!

    I was really hoping yours would win, so I was very excited when it did! I really love this poem, and this form! Thank you for opening up a new door for me! :-)


  • annamoy
    September 21, 2007

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    Lovely and what a great form this is! Congratulations on the gold trophy with this delightful poem.

    Ann


  • captain howdy
    September 17, 2007

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    such a lovely poem! I really like poems about the fae! You chose a great picture for this masterpiece!


  • ----michael----
    September 17, 2007

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    Is there a wood nymph in your pocket or are you just pleased to see me? Works better with banana!

    This is beautiful.


  • LexieLost
    September 17, 2007

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    LOVE IT

    I love this poem, sis. It had such a good flow to it. Well as good of flow as I could understand since this form of poetry is unknown to me. However, the way that you it makes me want to give it a try. *smirks* or not since I hate rhyme schemes. Well, it works for you, love. Your imagery in the poem was sharp, as it always is. Good luck in the contest!

    ~Kimberly~


  • StarEyes
    September 17, 2007

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    And once again, I am in awe of your form, Miss Form Queen! This is just amazing!!! Almost has a sing-song childlike quality to it! What a great job one this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and lots of love

    Nyetta


    • Amera gold member
      September 17, 2007
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      Thanks so much Nyetta, your comments are so encourageing and thoughtful.



      Love,
      Amera♥


  • Melodies
    September 16, 2007

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    OH MY GOSH!!

    I must make a note of this form because I LOVE IT SO MUCH!! How did you know? I totally get into the repeating lines in anything that sounds like a song. This poem is adorable. I might start writing this form and never write anything else for my whole life. Seriously, it appeals to me greatly.

    • Amera gold member
      September 16, 2007
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      Since this is not an anonymous contest I can answer you. Thanks so much for the wonderful comment. I love formal poetry if you need the directions, there are about 50 forms in the lists on my page.

      Love,
      Amera♥


  • HaleyMary
    September 16, 2007

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    Incredible, amazing write. The queen of form at her best in this piece. I love the flow, the imagery and I like how you made the key magical. It gave the poem a fairy tale feel to it. Good luck in the contest.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    September 16, 2007
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    Excellent.

    Very nice locket, and poem. Your knowledge of styles is amazing.


    • Amera gold member
      September 16, 2007
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      Thank you so much, your comments are always so encouraging.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 16, 2007

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    Amera, absolutely lovely and I know your Elves and Melodies will just love this rendition from your heart.



    Len

  • Fearylynn
    September 16, 2007

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    Now I feel all inadequate hehehe

    I love love LOVE this poem! It flows so well, and rolls off the tongue.

    I have never known of this type of poetry...I shall have to try one someday.

    Good luck in the contest!


  • jo-el
    September 16, 2007

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    this is too adorable. i like the sounds through out. very fun write you've put together. masterful charm...excellent


  • Swan song gold member
    September 16, 2007
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    opps i am a do do head

  • Swan song gold member
    September 16, 2007
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    I enjoyed the way this poem sang in a song slash chant type way. I could sense the value of the locket to your heart.


    • Amera gold member
      September 16, 2007
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      Thanks Jeff... humm. no bunnys huh? Don't like kids poems?


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    September 16, 2007

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    Beautiful!!! What a wonderful form. Just wonderful! The border is gorgeous too. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie

  • Swan song gold member
    September 16, 2007

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    As always you are a master of form and content.
    I have this on my mind about you and have been thinking about it for a long time. You are very young
    One of these days your poetry is going to be read and admired much more than it is now. I can see that
    Not that you are not admired now, It is going to go
    be like a shooting star. Believe me!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 16, 2007

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    I know what key the song is in, so sure, I will sing along. Maybe I'll even write a tune. This is beautiful and spirited. I love it!!


  • Man of Harlech silver member
    September 16, 2007

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    delightful

    This is a delightful bit of poetry. What child would not relish the story, and what adult would not wish it were true?


    • Amera gold member
      September 16, 2007
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      Hehe… Oh but it is true! You only have to believe.



      Love,
      Amera♥


  • Faeryn
    September 16, 2007

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    Awesome!! I don't think I've seen this form before...hmmm...
    anyways, this is really cool! I love the last stanza. aw, this poem is making me smile.
    cool picture also.

    -Tay-


  • Marctheman
    September 16, 2007

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    This is so beautiful Amara, love the form, the poem is brilliant, i love your writing, this piece has the character of a tale book. You are a great poet love your work.


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    September 16, 2007

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    This is definitely a lesson in traditional classic writting of poems. It is like reading something you would find in an old fairytale book, a pure classic of not only today, but of years to come. well done you little beauty.


  • Sacrificial Love
    September 16, 2007

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    This makes me smile....

    I believe you have a masterpiece here...reminds me of something that generations would learn...passing down to their children to recite to their children at bedtime. Funny how words sewn together can bring a sense of peace and comfort to a person.

    Very well done...

    xox
    Heidi

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