Smell of new life
in air and earth,
reminding me
of all days slipped by,
our stay here is short,
yet we plan
and schedule each day,
who will enjoy crumbly leaves,
and crazy winds.
I take my moment of today
as I promise to add one each day.
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Contest ~ Simplicity by Namita.
300 points, ended October 1, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Simply fantastic! You made me cry, the way you wrote. So beautiful. I think everyone should be able to do just that: take a moment to realize that life is precious...life is beautiful. All the best in the contest.
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Thank you so much for dropping by! Yes, Life is beautiful...
Thank you for your wishes!
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Wonderful. Simple... thats a beautiful word. Thank you much for showing what you painted in your mind... your words are soulful.
Luv,
~Candy
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Glad you enjoyed it dear...
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Love the ease and the mood that this poem plays.
Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest.
VIRGOAN
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You are welcome...Thank you for the wishes....and your lovely comment!
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Oh I like this it is very nice dear friend. I think you did really well with this one goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes
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Thank you so much.....So glad you enjoyed it....
Always delighted at your comments..
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I like this piece...but there's this one word that's bugging me...it just doesn't feel right...crusty leaves...maybe you should put crunchy...Idk crusty isn't right....at all. In my opinion.
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May be 'crusty' was a little way off..I added 'crumbly' How does that feel..
thanks for your thoughtful comment!
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Much better
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You know...come to think of it...I meant to write' crumbly' , but wrote 'crusty'..lol....Thanks for pointing it out...
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