Shell-like and delicate, hidden by hair
One to each side and a beautiful pair
The start of seduction, assault on the ear
Slowly inexorably they draw me near
Nibbling gently, they occupy time
And whispering softly I fill them with rhyme
Pearls on a lake-shore, with red beach around
From out of the centre comes delicate sound
My lips to the beach are drawn for a taste
To leave them behind would be criminal waste
A creature within wants to battle my tongue
On the ladder of lust it's the bottom-most rung
Slopes of perfection, each topped by a peak
Cannot be explored in much less than a week
All of the surface needs searching with love
And visual inspection is made from above
The texture is tested by lips, tongue and teeth
And hands are supporting the weight from beneath
A surface that's flat, a depression in view
Anything but a plain as it forms part of you
Butterfly kisses, From one side to the other
Far more careful and tender than babe loved by mother
The well at the centre is enticing and warm
And my tongue wants to map it's delectable form
Delicate petals of personal rose
The lips of a lover attracted to those
Peeping from leaves is tender young bud
Found by the lover, but missed by the stud
Tenderly teasingly open the flower
Passionate gardener for hour after hour
A detour we make to a smooth range of hills
Medicine more potent than any any doctors pills
Testing each manually, probing and squeezing
Just that they're there, is essentially teasing
Fingers exploring the valley between
Hinting at pleasure, you know what I mean
The detour was pleasant but here is the seat
The place where my musings I hope to complete
Gently the petals are teased til they part
And the journey within can finally start
No time is wasted, while a finger's inside
The lips and the tongue still directing the tide
Your body responds to each tender touch
It seems that it knows that I love you so much
Your breathing gets harsher, your hands find my head
"Enough lips and fingers, the real thing instead"
Upwards you lead me, till our passions can meet
Then we'll be together until our love is complete
Author notes
This is to a real woman, although she has not seen it yet.
A contest entry
- Quickie Contest By Aurielle by Aurielle.
300 points, ended September 24, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me go "ooh!!"...(Adults Only)-Prewrites Welcome! by Daizy21.
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400 points, ended October 5, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lustful Erotica Contest by ckwriter69.
910 points, ended October 25, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
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PLease comment below. Spelling or rhyming or scanning corrections welcome.
Comments
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very hot and sensual, I enjoyed your images and descriptions, rhyming was perfect. I do need to ask if you have entered more then one poem in our contest? The rules clearly state only one poem per poet. If so please pick one to stay and delete the others. Thanks for entering our contest and good luck.
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Disregard my comment on entering twice, my mistake, duh! I appologize
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No problem
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this sounds tempting
for me thats true
and you have me thinking
of some things and .....
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Very sensual
This is an amazing write. No spelling or grammar errors. Your rhymes were dead on. And the word usage was great. Very hot, very sensual, very nicely done. Thanks for entering and good luck.
Sunshine
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Very well written. Very descriptive,without totally going over the top, if you know what I mean, has a good sense of fun as well as sensuality.
Good write and congrats on gold.
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It was very enjoyable to write! And the recipient loved it. I'm glad that it struck you as it did that was where I was aiming, thanks for the comment.
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This is a very beautiful write,thank you for entering and good luck!Lucky her!
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It doens't sound sincere
but the flow and rhyme was excellent
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I am intrigued, it was pretty sincere when I was writing it :-)
Any pointers as to where you feel it slips? I always want to improve these things.
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this write was filled with respect and sensuality and I enjoyed it thoroughly, just a little observation:
"And hands are supporting the wight from beneath" - should it not be weight?
Thank you for sharing this - this woman sounds like a diamond
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Thank-you gorgeous, fixed.
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One hell of a journey, complete with detours.
A very passionate and enjoyable read.
Sue
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It was a passionate and enjoyable write too :-)
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