I ache...
I ache down to the marrow of my bones.
I have no ikling on how to loose my self from the pain.
Its...just there, screamming to be noticed.
Demanding that I feel...
Implying that I will never be able, to surface from the murky depths of
this pain...
From blood shot eyes,
Tears continue to rain.
Pouring its salt deep into the carvens of the earth...
Choking the life out of nature...
Creating a place for me to mourn you...
A dry, desolate, baren land...
With a broken heart...
And A broken soul...
I look up at the heavens where your soul now rests.
Wait for me there...
Have faith that we'll be together again...
Have faith for the both of us...
For I have lost my faith on the wings of your last breath.
Wait for me Love...
Please...wait for me...
A contest entry
- Almost anything goes!! O_O by vampireblood.
400 points, ended October 22, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
For My Soldier...I love you... 'I loke to bite'
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I've never read any of your pieces before, but I'm glad I read this one, this will be the inspiration for my next piece of writing. I love the way your emotions are so outstanding in this piece, it is truly the work of a genious...or a very emotionally in tuned person
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Wow...I thank you with all my heart for loving this piece to the point thatinspires you. This one was written in tears for a great man who I love and wished that my heartwas his had it not been for another...then after hearing sad news of is illness...welll this came spilling out without hesitation. Thank you fo your critique I appreciate the positive feedback.
~Desir
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Aww... this brings a tear to ones eye, your desperation is haunting as such
This is an excellent piece of poetry full of emotional content... a plaeasure to read you
Keep up the good work
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i thank you for taking the time to do so.
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This was a really good piece. I almost DQ'd you actually, cause I didnt see the I like to bite thing
...but I liked this, I loved the ending, it was my favorite. It just leaves the poem with wait and hope. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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aweeeee-some
it's good. i don't even know anyone in the military, i can't say i've felt that way for that reason, but i understand it.
niiiiiiice one!
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This is awesome.
I really like this.
I'm joining the military soon,
And I wonder if my girlfriend will send me anything like this.
I'm sorry you have lost faith.
I don't know the situation, but...
I wish it was better, I suppose.
You've done a good job on this,
And you convey your emotions very well.
-XIII-
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Thank you...at the time I had lost faith, now I have it...I'm more than ceratin that he would be well...thank you for reading and glad you enjoyed...
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I'm glad it's gotten better. Thank you for your words on my poetry as well.
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Thank you and whenever you need...I'm a good listener and reader...lol the serious side of me I suppose...
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I am too,
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Will keep that thought in mind.
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wow
thats a great poem right there makes me wanna tissue, and that doesnt happen often. -
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Awww thanks... i wrote this for someone who I hold very close to my heart. Its pretty much based on some real emotions and a really bad situation. Thank you for reading, and I wil most definitly retun the favor...
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