A twenty-two year old girl stands
at the end of the dock crying
as she waves goodbye to
her husband.
Countless others are there
seeing their loved ones
off to war.
They all stand and watch together
as the ship disappears
over the horizon.
A seventy-six year old woman stands
at the end of a time beaten dock.
Countless others are there,
for her memory recalls them.
They all stand and wait together
for a ship to appear
on the horizon.
Author notes
For those who have lost a loved one in times of war.
Thank you for reading.
Written September 25th, 2003
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A contest entry
- Military Poems by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended April 21, 2008, 94 entries
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Thank you for entering my military contest. This is one of the better poems that I have read in a long time. This has really touched me and it is written so well. Thank you so much for sharing this with us all.
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Fantastic
Ok man thats freakin heavy. Was it this war..WWII..WWI? It dosn't matter somenever came home and will always be rembered. I love this man..I truly do. Awsome. -
I'm glad you liked Fruit Salad, lol. A bunch of my friends offline thought I'd lost it when I shouwed them the write. lol!
I loved the emotions circling this poem. It was very well written. I especially liked the way you jumped from the when she was a girl to her being an old lady. It shows that time goes by so fast...
-morgana
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good
i remember when my ex-b/f told me he joined the marines, i about fainted. -
awww thats really sad, really makes you think about some of the effects the wars had for people other than the ones in the countrys getting bombed, it effects all, beautifully written ~anya~
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Wow, Rodney, This was intense writing. So sad.
Anna
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Rodney thats was nice write,I how it feel when you love somebody and they are To war and it might be a change he might come back to you.A seventy-six year old woman stands at the end of a time beaten dock to recalls the memory . that was good poeme. love queen
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Very solemn and melancholic write. I liked the way you structured
and presented this poem.
Enjoyed this poem.
Jen
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That was great just like most the ones i read before, You are truly a gifted writer well maybe a little over praise their but you are one the better ones i read on here thus far and i'll go read some more soon
Draco Le Tempros
The Phoenix Wolf
As the waters flow along waves
off to war this men try to save
lost far from home
the grim reaper has come -
This was a beautiful write. I never have had anyone close to me, leave...and not return this way. However my Mothers first love left... and he did not return. I have seen how its affected her, even after almost 60 years. My only thoughts are...she will see him again.... when God calls her home.
Thank your for allowing me to read this beautiful expression.
My best..
Mary ann -
Rodney, this was simply beautiful...i have never lost someone in a war...but my brother was in Iraq the first time and i remember the hell it was...the waiting...never knowing if word would come that he would not return home. Even writing this...i have chills all over and it brings me back to that place of pain. I empathize with anyone who ever has or ever has to feel this...it is an agony beyond agonies. So very well penned, my friend.
UB
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So heartwrenching this was, Short but to the point. You have such a way with words, Rodney. I couldn't imagine losing my love, and my heart goes out to all who have. Thank you for such a touching poem.
Take Care
Kristine -
I really like this poem. Inspired by the comment above me, I put on "My Heart Will Go On" and read the poem over again. A touching, beautiful piece. Good job. Thank you so much for the comments on my "poison girl" pieces. It means so much to me. And ironically, I just ate 3 cheese potatoes the night I wrote that poem! Creepy, eh? Take care, and great writing.
Elise -
very good write!
Hi Rodney,
this is a wonderful write!
thanks for the nice words!!!
This reminds me of, "Titanic"
doe'sn't it?
~Rena -
A beautifully done piece. I enjoyed reading it and can relate well to it. Flawless and classic in it's splendor and feeling. blessed be
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Loved It
Great write my dear and enjoyed this very much~ Very touching and to those who are still out fighting for our country and those here at home~ We appreciate all you do~ We are here for you~ Keep that flame burning bright so they can see their way home at night~ Beautiful poem sweetie~ Big hugs and much love~ Desire
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very well written... War is a very sad time for ones who have loved ones fighting in it. this really said it all...i liked it!
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sad.
war steals so many lives, and sometimes it doesn't even do any good. wonderful picture of a woman who still wishes her husband would return home to her. blessed be.
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*tear*
Naz~ -
wow... amazing write.. very touching and sad. Great job. keep up the amazing work.
god bless
pippison -
Rodney thats a great write, I use to work in a retirement home and I knew of 2 ladys or partners had gone to war and they never returned the sense of loss is huge. A very touching write.
Lakota x -
Very poingnant piece here Rodney and no doubt in another 50 years it will be a whole new generation going off to war because lessons are never learned. I have someone very close to me joining the army next year when she graduates high school. They star working on the when they are juniors now and sign them up a year in advance. They are promise stateside duties if they want but in times of war everyone goes. Love this piece, one of your best.
Desiree
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so sad, honest poem. even though I am a pacifist, i still can understand and respect people who have lost people in wars or have people fighting in wars right now.
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