Those merry hearts once sang in gladness,
sailing upon your dazzling liquid silk,
whose ships you tossed about in madness –
O savage tempest, what power you possess!
As foamy spray raged, you slew them there,
after your sparkling, sunlit waves consoled;
and your frothy lips whispered peaceful calm,
betraying them to death, oh what lies you told!
Deep ocean of fury, beneath mirrored sky,
you buried them in sheets of layered brine;
now resting forever upon your murky floor,
all those poor souls, lost to a distant time.
Their echoes now cry within found shells
placed upon the listening ear,
revealing so many phantom voices,
to all those who wish to hear:
“O Sea, do for us as sky does rain,
whose droplets rise to live again!
Release us from our watery grave,
we beg of you, our souls please save!”
In a list
A contest entry
- Impress Me by Crook Oneil.
1200 points, ended October 27, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments?
Comments
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Well done on the bronze Cyn
i love this, you share the same love of the ocean with me. hope it won't be long before you can sit before the irish sea.
Dolores xxx
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Thank you for the compliment...
I'm glad you like the poem on the savageness of the sea, she can be quite heartless at times. That's the nature of nature. I AM going to travel o'er that cold-hearted sea, and NOTHING is going to stop me this time. But I plan to fly 
so she can do no harm with her watery ways... 
See ya soon, Sis, keep your pen flowing, and the tea kettle hot. xxxx Slan xxxx Love ya, Cyn
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Congratulations on the bronze trophy!!!
I always knew you had it in you, to create such a masterpiece is oure genius!!! Thank you for sharing!!!
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Ah....Your love and the sea and the nature of it upon those who know it's power is so like my own writes...This is a prize of a write dear friend...Awesome lines, flow, and rhyme...It is a cry of a soul for those lost to her wiles....Magnificent!
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Magnificent!!!!!!!! I love this one!!!!! So impressionistic and mind blowing!!!! The flow of words is great!!!!!
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life is like the sea always in madness always in fury always killing this poem is like you talking about life being the sea wow you have once again amazed me
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Thank you!!!
Hi Crook Oneil, Thank you so much for this beautiful trophy! 
I really appreciate your generousity, and your hosting this great contest for all of us!! I really had fun with it... and I'd like to say Congratulations!!! to all the winners Thanks again!!! Peace, Cyn 
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wow... very well done. i really appreciate the quatraine style, and the way you brought it all together. i'm impressed.
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Thank You!!!
Hi Crook Oneil, Thank you so much for this beautiful trophy! I really appreciate your generousity, and your hosting this great contest for all of us!! I really had fun with it... and I'd like to say Congratulations to all the winners Thanks again!!! Peace, Cyn
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Oh wow, this is absolutely amazing! You have captured the essence of the sea so well I feel like I am there. Such beauty is etched into each word you have penned. Best wishes in the contest you entered
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"O Sea, do for us as sky does rain,
whose droplets rise to live again!
Release us from our watery grave,
we beg of you, our souls please save!”
This is just beautiful. So much emotion, turmoil, yet calm, just like the sea. When I look into the water, I feel the same way....all those souls crying out from their watery graves..just lovely, Cyn!
And you call ME a goddess of poetry.....ha! lol
Love,
Jin
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Echoes now cry within, pleaced upon the listening ear! Lovely lines! Droplets that live within...Wonderful write...~Sie
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Thank you, Sie!!!
I'm glad you enjoyed!!! Thanks for stopping by to read my work tonight!!!
Peace & love, Cyn
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