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Crushed

She crosses the room,
Head bowed,
Droplets falling from her closed eyes.
Who is she kidding?
She does want their opinions,
But still it kills her to hear it.

Why can’t they just accept the fact that she knows what she’s doing?
She’s not their little girl anymore.
She sinks to the ground,
Letting go of everything.
Shackles come, wrapping around her wrists and ankles.
She pulls against them,
They tighten.

A sob escapes her throat
As she hangs her head again.
It’s no use,
They’ll never let her go.
Freedom’s always in sight,
But just beyond reach.

Bars around her heart,
She can’t go anywhere.
Trapped.
She sighs heavily,
Still weeping.
The words repeat over and over in her head.
Is it worth the pain?

Can he help her?
Or is she beyond saving?
The silence presses against her hollow ears,
Driving her mad.
She leans her head alongside the stonewall,
Wishing it would all end.

Too many scars that can’t be healed,
She just wants to give up.
It’d be so easy.
So…
Why can’t she do it?

Something always stops her.
Whether it be a memory,
Or a promise…
She doesn’t know.
But she’s sick of shallow lies,
Promises not kept.
Can they see how it kills her?

Tomorrow’s another day,
But the same thoughts will always be there…

Anissa Sapp
10:09 PM 9/15/07

Author notes

This poem is about when my boyfriend caame to meet my parents. And how I was feeling afterward. As you can tell, it didn't go so well, but it could've been worse.

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  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 17, 2007

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    This is a very nice piece thank you for your entry and goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes and much love


  • Nam
    October 3, 2007

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    I felt that it started to become repetitious after the 4th part. I feel it could be shortened down a bit to knock off the repetition. Sometimes repetition is good but in this piece, I feel it hurts more than anything.


  • vampireblood
    October 3, 2007
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    I really liked this piece. It was a great write. It showed so much emotion and imagery in it. I could picture myself in the same position you were in as I read this. I liked it. Good job! Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
    ~Vampy~


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    September 26, 2007

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    thank you foer a great write. this is weel written and truly emotional. are you still with this boyfriend? Parents can be pains when they meet someone new and i won't try to stand up for them but i will say this. One day you will be the parent and it will be your turn to meet some strange boy who has stolen your daughter's attention from you. parents just don't want to think of their kids eve getiing hurt.


  • Naridill gold member
    September 26, 2007

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    "Tomorrow’s another day,
    But the same thoughts will always be there…"

    Beautifully said, this piece has intriguing word play.

    Much luck


  • xxlisajazminexx
    September 26, 2007

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    beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    this was truly lovely ........
    full of pain and sorrow .......
    i have been there before.......
    thank you so much for entering in my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • TaintedBeauty
    September 25, 2007
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    Wow...very heartfelt. I had an experience like this one time, and I tell you it wasn't fun, so I can totally relate to the feeling you described. I like the imagery of the chains being put around your wrists and ankles. Though it's a negative view, it signifies a parent's hold on their child, though it is within good reason. Very nice!

  • fireangels
    September 23, 2007
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    I can relate this poem. Keep writing and you will go far.


  • ForgottenMemories
    September 16, 2007

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    Wow. This was a completely amazing piece! It was worded well, had a lot of imagery and was very descriptive. There was a lot of emotions running all the way through this piece, and I very much enjoyed reading.
    As you said in your authors notes, it could have been worse, but the way the poem is written it sounds like nothing could be worse!
    Thanks for entering and good luck!
    Sleep-N


  • Locke
    September 16, 2007
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    I love this. I think it's amazing. Ummm I don't think I have anything I could really say that you could actually use to improve it with. I like in the beginning, 'She does want their opinions, But still it kills her to hear it.' I imagine that that's something a lot of younger people could relate to.


  • SignifyingNothing
    September 15, 2007
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    Well-expressed

    This poem is easy to relate to. You express your emotions well.

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