One lonesome room,
Was all that I knew.
Once to be free,
Was all I could hope for.
I am a sex slave,
And for those who don't know,
I've been abused and hurt,
By a man I hardley know.
I just know that every night it seems,
Before he goes to bed,
He whips me and he beats me,
Until I wish that I were dead.
He throws me to the floor,
As he pushes himself inside me,
And I ache all over,
As he lays beside me.
I fight back and he whips me,
I scream and he beats,
I cry and he yells,
And then he just leaves me.
I've heard stories of great places,
Where women are equal to men.
And I long to see those kind faces,
Of people who won't chain me to a bed.
Today I am hurt,
Tomarrow set free,
And I can't wait to see,
Just what true life can be.
Author notes
I wrote this after I read a magazine article of a 17 year old girl who was a sex slave. This may seem unrealistic, but in a lot of poor countries, unfortunatly it is comman for young girls to be sold and sexualy abused. There is nowhere for these women to turn, because even a lot of the police will sell them. It reminds me not to take for granted my freedom, and to be grateful each day for the people who gave that to us.
A contest entry
- Its about the poetry, not the points!!! by mcw120588.
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Comments
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Man this is such an awesome poem...really...really....really sad but a really...really...really good write. Kepp up the good work.
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Wow.. an amazing painful and sad poem full of emotion and pain... For this not being a personal experience.. you did an amazing job of incorpurating (major spell check) pain and feeling into this poem. great job and thank you for entering.
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I agree with DramaQueen, this is a heart wrenching poem of issues that should be addressed and never happen. Probably should be in the 'adult' category but is a great poem.
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Peer Pressure :)
What a heartbreaking write; truly, this is an issue that needs more attention.
Possibly, this should be in the 'adult' category
Keep up the great work, and best of luck in the contest!
Maria
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I think that its really sad and you do raise awarenss but it could use more creative diction and more use of metaphors to get your message across with more power. It has potential but maybe you should rewrite using metaphors to get it across and imagery because that would really pack a punch because I can tell you care about this issue.
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Thoughtful
This was though-provoking and does make me thankful to live in England where this thing is unheard of!! Description...? *shudders* Perfect!!
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i love this poem. ive read almost all your poems before but i never rated them. sorry it was mean of me. i didnt mean to. it was when i first got on this site. anyway i liked this poem. i was shocked when i read it. i dont know where you got the inspiration for it but it was absolutly awsome. i bow to your awsomeness. I like it!=)
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good poem, it presents a horrible idea and describes it brutally and effectively. great job and thanks for entering
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Littered with typos, so out it goes as promised.
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oh this is so sad. i hear about these kind of stories quite often and it just depresses me so much. this was a great write though on such a sad topic. thank you for entering my contest and best of luck.
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I feel I ought to remove the entry, because I don't feel it really links with the quote. I'm sorry, it's a heartfelt write - almost as though you'd been through the trauma yourself.
Thanks very much for sharing this with me, and please feel free to have a browse of my poetry, if you ever have a spare moment and you get the urge.
Sarah
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How does this link with my quote? :S
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Great poem, but to be honest it kinda grossed me out, a poem is supposed to move someone, not make them say ewee.
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Wow! STELLAR!!! I love the imagery and rhyme scheme. The last stanza was like icing on top of cake. I see you read my rules, Brownie points for you! Thanks for the entry and good luck!
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OMG This is Amazing
Wow, this is one of the most amazing poems I have ever read on here or anywhere else!
To put yourself in to the postition of those thousands of girls that are abused each year and write such an outstanding peice as if from their point of veiw, truely amazing.
I love how you tie so much into it, not just the horrors these girls live through, but the hope that they have. The last verse is truely breath taking. I mean, here we are, living the life most of these poor girls could neveer imagine, and here is one whose only goal in life, is to be able to have goals in life.
I love this poem. Your are truely an amazing poet. Wonderful write!
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A difficult piece to read but so worthy and needed.
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i told u i didn't want anything new, i'm going to remove it from the contest
i'd say put in something new, but the contest is already closed
srry
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