Smiling abruptly
tears unannounced
groping heart
restless eyes
calender revered.
Author notes
Ten words for an emotion:
Missing my love
A contest entry
- WORD ECONOMY CHALLENGE! Ten-Word Poems... by TooRainbow.
675 points, ended September 23, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Right on the mark!
In a word, 'missing my love' could also be called 'pining'. Wow! Do you capture it! "Smiling abruptly": that special someone pops unbidden into your mind yet again. "tears unannounced": the emotional glimpse of that happiness experienced only serves to remind you of the intensity of the void without it and your body literally weeps in longing, without your knowledge or consent. "groping heart": what a fresh way to phrase 'yearning'! "restless eyes": longing to look upon the face that brings amour, frantically glancing around to find something to do to stay busy to avoid losing your mind in circumstances you can't control, but must endure, desperately hoping your gaze will fall on something to bring you some small measure of comfort. "calendar revered.": you find it! Only this many more days! HOPE! The knowledge that you can persevere... The back and forth, up and down, side to side, momentum of this poem is quite truthful of what it is like to pine for a beloved. You definitely captured the emotion out of the air and passed it onto your readers! BRAVO! Excellent job~thank you for this entry!
Sheryl
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wonderful job ten words for an emotion! wow...you said it well with so few words
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Thanks...it just came out thinking about my hubby dear!
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oh yes indeed i know and feel these words.
how wonderfully penned. you did a wonderful job poet.
thanks for sharing and best of luck to you.
tory -
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Thanks for the wishes....this feeling is so haunting I tell you, never lets go of you!
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