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Why?

Aching pain,
I feel so weak.

When I see you
I just cant speak.

Stomach is twisting,
I don't know why.
My heart is full,
I cant but help cry.

 

I see you walking,

down the hall.

While you're holding onto her,

I feel so small.

 

Hopefully one day you will see,

that the girl you should be loving is me.

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  • xofightinirishx3
    April 15, 2008

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    this poem is really good...its hort and sweet and hits home with me...tahnsk for entering and good luck


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    September 24, 2007
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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    You have penned a poem that hits close to the heart of most of us at some time or another. I doubt there are many who won't relate. I suppose he will either see the light or he will lose out in the long run

    Keep writing and again, welcome to the site.


  • FlurryOfDancingFire
    September 16, 2007

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    Alright, so I'm the fourth to comment, but it's still worth the same =)

    So... did this help you at all? It's really full of some strong feelings. It's short, and simple, but it says a lot.

    Well done Darkened.

    ~Flurry


  • SuPeR FrEaKy
    September 15, 2007
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    aww sad but cute in a way

  • Love-Loser2011
    September 15, 2007

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    this poem is really good and describes how i feel a lot. its like you like this person and all you want to do is be with them, but you cant because they are in love with someone else. its the story of my life and i wish that it didnt exist. its like you are invisible and that person will never see you, but thats all you hope for and you hold on forever but they always let go. great poem with lots of feeling. i encourage you to keep writing.


  • ObscurityJester
    September 15, 2007
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    :)

    I'll be your first comment. But, I really like it! And I so told you that this would help.

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